Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

several productions of eating items and drinking products remain increase level of sweetness, which reasons of health issues. Sugary goods should be made more costly to support individual to consume lower sugar. My preference describes in upcoming with valid explanations and relevant example.

To begin with the former viewpoints, many branded companies and business firm's manufactured eats and drinks contain a lot of sugar in their products which affected on health very badly. However, parle is well known company which make cookies for child which is mostly used sugar for making cookies very sweet and affected the children's health, and some children's have diebi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 104 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely restricted. While the student attempts to introduce the topic and state a position, the argument remains underdeveloped and incomplete. The essay stops abruptly mid-sentence, preventing a full exploration of the prompt. To improve, the student must provide a structured response with a clear introduction, two or three body paragraphs with supporting evidence, and a conclusion. The current length and lack of depth significantly limit the ability to address all parts of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the text is too short to demonstrate effective cohesion or progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes misused, such as the awkward transition 'To begin with the former viewpoints'. The lack of a clear conclusion or a fully developed argument makes the overall flow disjointed. To improve, the student should focus on using linking words to connect sentences and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which hinders the clarity of the message. Phrases like 'productions of eating items' and 'business firm's manufactured eats' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over collocations. There are also spelling errors, such as 'diebi' (presumably 'diabetes'), which further impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas regarding health policy or economics. To improve, the student should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to health and government policy and practice using these words in complete, grammatically correct sentences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the intended meaning. Examples include 'remain increase level of sweetness', 'which reasons of health issues', and 'some children's have diebi'. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, verb tenses, and pluralization. The attempt at complex sentences is unsuccessful, leading to confusion. To improve, the student needs to focus on fundamental grammar, specifically subject-verb agreement, proper use of articles, and sentence construction. Consistent practice with basic sentence patterns will help reduce the frequency of errors and improve overall readability.

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