Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, many health issues cause due to high amount of sugar. level in every product. This essay agrees with the statement ongoing to sugary beverage are more cheaper and easy to available.
On the one hand, many soft drinks and meals contain extreme level of sugar which cause many health diseases. Many street foods add more sugar in their drinks to make more delicious just because more consumer will buy it. Many restaurant add unhealthy items in their product to better taste which deliver neumrous health issues. For Instance, coca cola and other soft drink companies claims that to high amount of sugar level create their drinks more strong and energetic. Consequently, the amount of people such as teenagers more desperate to drink it and that is the main reason today adolescents are found more diabetic and weight management issues. These product make more obesity and Diabetic patients as compared to those who do not take this product.
On the other hand, companies how make this product will not be happy for increase the amount of their product due to the supply. If the product make more expensive, specially teenagers will not buy this and company come to loss. The government should introduce strict laws and regulations on these companies how add large volume sugar in their product. Furthermore, individual also make some awareness campaign for their amount of product to be more expensive which will help many people and also it will reduce the amount of health problems.
In the conclusion, the high level of sugar create some health issues. Individual should avoid these product who contains high amount of sugar level. Moreover, these products should be more costly, so people will think before to buy these product.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of increasing prices for sugary products. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention health issues and the impact on teenagers, the arguments lack depth and specific evidence. For instance, the claim that companies will 'come to loss' if prices increase is a generalization that could be better supported with economic reasoning. The conclusion is brief and repeats points already made rather than synthesizing them. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides more detailed explanations or examples to fully develop your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'In the conclusion' is a non-standard transition, and 'companies how make this product' shows a misuse of relative pronouns that disrupts the flow. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and some sentences feel disconnected from the previous ones. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'nevertheless') more naturally and ensure that referencing (using pronouns to refer back to previous nouns) is clear and accurate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'more cheaper' (which is grammatically incorrect) and 'more delicious'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'more desperate to drink it' and 'deliver numerous health issues', which do not sound natural in an academic context. To improve, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid repeating simple adjectives. Using more sophisticated vocabulary related to health and economics would significantly enhance your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many health issues cause due to'), incorrect comparative structures (e.g., 'more cheaper'), and misuse of relative pronouns (e.g., 'companies how make'). Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. To improve, review basic sentence construction, specifically the use of articles, prepositions, and comparative adjectives. Practicing the difference between 'who' and 'which' for relative clauses will also help clarify your writing.
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