Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is widely acknowledged that, many food and beverages companies made their product with higher levels of sugar, which may cause individuals some serious health consequences, to tackle this issue some believe that authorities should sugary products more higher cost for people can consume less. I partly agree with this given assertion, my supportive arguments along with the rationales, thereof have been discuss in succeeding body paragraphs.
On the one hand, if government can increased the tax of unhealthy food so it direct impact on people daily consumption, because in this modern era many people not have much time to cook food at home so they prefer to buy outside food, which carry a lot of sugar in their food. Moreover, increase unhealthy food will unparalleled benefits to government that money they spent on improve the health care system and infrastructure. for example, if soft drinks are more expensive in school canteen and near education institutes so its higher chance children consume prefer to healthy food.
On the other hand,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count, which severely limits the development of ideas. While you state a position, the essay is incomplete, as it cuts off after the second paragraph. The arguments provided are relevant but lack the necessary depth and extension required for a full task response. Because the essay is unfinished, it fails to address all parts of the prompt, resulting in a low score for task achievement. To improve, you must ensure you complete all sections of the essay, including a full counter-argument and a concluding summary, while meeting the minimum word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, using transition signals like 'On the one hand' and 'Moreover'. However, the structure is incomplete, as the second body paragraph is entirely missing. Paragraphing is present, but the lack of a conclusion and a second body paragraph disrupts the overall flow and progression of the argument. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the abrupt ending makes the text feel disjointed. To improve, focus on developing a clear, balanced structure with a proper introduction, two distinct body paragraphs, and a concluding paragraph.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision and range expected for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'made their product with higher levels' instead of 'manufacture products with high levels' and 'more higher cost' instead of 'higher prices'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little evidence of less common lexical items or idiomatic expressions. To improve, focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to express complex ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'many food and beverages companies made their product' (tense error), 'authorities should sugary products more higher cost' (missing verb and incorrect comparative structure), and 'if government can increased' (modal verb error). There is a limited range of complex structures, and the existing ones are often used incorrectly. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones.
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