Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the period of globalisation , many people are believed that increase in sugar level are major cause of different health problems .and more expensive products should be discover to consume low sugar . In my opinion, I strongly agree with this notion and my opinion will be discussed in further paragraphs with a suitable conclusion .

supporting my agreement or disagreement to the given statement, I firmly believe that manufacturing food is the significant cause of increase in sugar level in the human bloodstream and making different types of diseases. for instance, At international level survey was held in Pakistan by the health community and their purpose is to count how many persons ( youngest and old ) lived in Pakistan were sugar patient. In conclusion of this survey , probability were shown in old age in 2016. in addition ,

explaining some of the another supporting points in favour this statement, it is true that food like chocolates, and artificially prepared products in labs use biochemicals in their products that disturb the insulin level and patient survived with low glucose that may cause death. for this some expensive products are develop for decrease the level of sugar low . to cite an example , some company started work on this project the after knowing the real diagnose of this disease and make insulin injection for cure . As a consequence government should take actions on the company who sale expensive supplements . my suggested point is that checking holder have authority to check the correct maintaince level of sugar in any kind of food products . and separates preparation will be done both for sugar patients and also for healthy persons .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt, but the development of ideas is inconsistent and often unclear. While you state your agreement, the supporting arguments are confusing. For example, the mention of a survey in Pakistan lacks a clear link to the argument about taxing sugary products. Furthermore, the suggestion that companies should make 'insulin injection for cure' is off-topic, as the prompt asks about taxing sugary food to reduce consumption, not about medical treatments. The position is present but not consistently maintained or logically supported throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there are attempts to use cohesive devices like 'In conclusion' and 'in addition', they are often used incorrectly or do not connect the ideas logically. Paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. The transition between the idea of taxing products and the discussion of insulin injections is particularly disjointed, which hinders the overall flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used inaccurately. Phrases like 'making different types of diseases' and 'checking holder have authority' are unnatural and impede clarity. There is an attempt to use some academic vocabulary, such as 'globalisation' and 'biochemicals', but these are often used in contexts that do not make sense. To improve, you should focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that the words you choose accurately reflect the meaning you intend to convey.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('increase in sugar level are major cause'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which makes the writing difficult to read. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors such as verb tense consistency and pluralization.

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