Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the contemporary era, industries is widely regarded as foundation for economic development, employment opportunities and improve living standard, making a manufacturing-related issues a central topic of global discussion. Although many individuals argue that foods and drinks producing companies that contains high levels of sugar should be made expensive and increase price of product in order to encourage consumer to consume less sugar, other promote these types of food for their own economic benefit. however i am completely disagree with the perception and believe that companies should produce health and less sugary food to improve living standard and well being of individual.
one of the prominent reason of encourage government and individual to increase the price of sugary products is that, it reduces heart related problems and issues. in today fast pace environment people are mostly so busy so they preferred ready made food which are highly unhealthy and contain unhealthy fats. when people consum
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits the development of your ideas. While you state a position, the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, preventing a full exploration of the topic. You mention the health benefits of reducing sugar, but the argument lacks the necessary depth and supporting examples required for a Task 2 essay. To improve, you must ensure you complete the task by writing at least 250 words and providing a balanced, fully developed argument that addresses all parts of the prompt, including a clear conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, such as using an introductory paragraph and starting a body paragraph. However, the abrupt ending makes it impossible to assess the overall coherence of the piece. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the misuse of 'however' at the start of the third sentence. Paragraphing is present but underdeveloped due to the incomplete nature of the text. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, fully realized main idea.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication, but it lacks the precision and range expected for higher bands. There are several errors in word form and collocation, such as 'industries is widely regarded as foundation' (should be 'industry is regarded as a foundation') and 'foods and drinks producing companies' (should be 'food and drink manufacturing companies'). You also repeat basic terms like 'unhealthy' and 'sugar'. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and ensure you use the correct grammatical forms of the words you choose.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('industries is', 'companies that contains'), missing articles ('as foundation', 'as a central topic'), and punctuation errors, such as the lack of capitalization at the start of sentences. The sentence structures are relatively simple, and the attempt at complex sentences is often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, consistent capitalization, and the correct use of articles before nouns.
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