Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is an unreliable truth that lot of individuals eat that type of food in which huge amount ofdsuger ingredients are involved which is sometime dangrous or not beneficial for person health. I agree that these products could be given more expensive in market as a result everyone can't affort it on the other hand goernment take strict action against it.
On the one hand, there are variety of disadvantages of using sugar products. Firstly when youngsters eat or drink a lot of cool drinks such as pepsi or coke they want to feel relax and eat some special like cake or pasta for enjoyment. For example on special events they eat a variety of food in which sugar and colorine are involved this can cause serious problems such as cancer ,brain problems as well as heart problem this leads to serious issue.Secondly minors buy and eat a variety of instant food in schools at break time for freshment as a result they can't concentrate on their studies they face serious difficulties also they face teehth problem which is very serious issue now.Addionally individuals drink a huge amount of coffe or tea to feel relax due to which they consume massive caffine.
Moreover, there are few steps from which we tackle this problem. First and foremost authoroties shuold take strict action against it. For example they run some compaines and also post on social media accounts that more sugar consumption is not beneficial fopr our health as well as community they should increase tax on these type of products from which everyone can't affort it. Last but least the government should spend this budget for other diseases in hospital through which they save their communty.
In conclusion, there are more disadvantages of using sugar products the advantages can't outweigh it. Although they are tasty while with the high cost individuals can't buy it they spend this money for other purpose.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the health problems associated with sugary food and drinks and agreeing that they should be made more expensive to reduce consumption. A clear position is stated in the introduction, and supporting arguments regarding health issues like heart problems and cancer are provided. However, the ideas are often under-developed and lack clear logical expansion. For example, the mention of youngsters wanting to feel relaxed and eating cake or pasta is somewhat disjointed, and the examples lack precision. The response meets all task requirements in terms of addressing the prompt's core question, but the overall development of ideas is limited, aligning best with a Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps structure the response, but the logical progression and overall flow are frequently disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices. Transitional phrases like 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' are used, but their application does not always accurately reflect the logical relationships between ideas. Additionally, referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation errors (such as missing commas and periods) make it difficult to follow the progression of arguments. These organizational weaknesses place the response firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted in range. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'dsuger', 'dangrous', 'affort', 'goernment', 'colorine', 'teehth', 'Addionally', 'caffine', 'authoroties', and 'shuold'. While the writer attempts to use some less common terms like 'consumption' and 'authorities', inaccurate word choices and frequent spelling errors strain the reader and impede comprehension in several places. This level of lexical control corresponds to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive achievement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. There are major issues with sentence boundaries, run-on sentences, and basic grammatical structures (e.g., 'these products could be given more expensive in market as a result everyone can't affort it'). Errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles occur in almost every sentence. Because these frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning, the performance reflects the Band 4 descriptor.
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