Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this industrial world, majority of the food we consume in our daily life is processed by scientific methods.We should be careful with our diet to be mentally and physically healthy and active. High level of carbohydrates in our brain drupts our chemical functioning and drasticaly alter the hormones which are required to perform our daily tasks efficiently.

On the one hand,if you intake more then the required amount in less duration of time it can be injurious to health as our body cannot process more then its need and this sugar will be accomulated in excessive amount willl result in diabetes or various other health issues. Chemicaly enhanced food is not enriched with healthier components due to the addition of preservative, flavorants and other additives. Pacakging and storage conditions can also have negative effect on the food and may denature the food, Food may look good from the outside but will be not be edible. Therefore, it should be costly and more importantly banned for younger childern.

On the other hand, sugar are the building blocks of our body and are play essential role in our routine. However natural sugary sources should be the part of our life like fruits, shakes and home cooked deserts. We should adapt a healthy lifestyle habbits to be active, physically fit and active. Lower sugar levels (hypoglycemia) is also a life threathing condition and to avoid this, taking porper amount of sugar is equally important.

In conclusion, Government should do built a strategy to divert the mind of young generation from processed food towards healthier diet and introduce the availability of natural sources to the people for the betterment of the society. Taxes and raw material should also be made expensive for processed food so that it will not be available in cheaper price to the consumer.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing the health impacts of sugary products and presenting a clear position on whether they should be made more expensive. The writer expresses an opinion in the introduction and concludes by reiterating support for government intervention and taxation. However, the development of ideas tends to be limited and slightly disjointed in places. For instance, the discussion moves abruptly from chemical functioning in the brain to physical conditions like diabetes, and the mention of younger children and banning products appears suddenly without full elaboration. While the main stance is clear, some arguments regarding natural sources and processed foods are slightly over-generalized. Overall, the response fulfills the basic requirements of the task, earning a band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into four paragraphs, providing a coherent overall arrangement with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs presenting opposing views, and a conclusion. However, cohesion at the sentence level is frequently faulty or mechanical. There are noticeable missing spaces after punctuation marks throughout the text, such as in 'methods.We' and 'One hand,if'. Cohesive devices are sometimes used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'On the one hand' followed immediately by another 'On the one hand' in the subsequent paragraph instead of a contrasting transition like 'On the other hand'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly with pronoun usage regarding 'sugar' and 'it'. Paragraphing is present, but internal logical progression requires better signposting to guide the reader smoothly, placing this criterion at a band 5.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'processed', 'preservative', 'flavorants', 'hypoglycemia', and 'detrimental'. However, there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors that detract from the writing, including 'drupts' for disrupts, 'drasticaly', 'accomulated', 'willl', 'Chemicaly', 'Pacakging', 'childern', 'habbits', 'threathing', 'porper', and 'do built'. Some expressions are unnatural or inaccurate, such as 'intake more then the required amount' and 'cheaper price'. Although the intended meaning usually remains clear despite these flaws, the frequent lexical inaccuracies limit the score to a band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some ambition with conditional structures and subordinate clauses, as seen in 'if you intake more then the required amount in less duration of time it can be injurious to health'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors including subject-verb agreement issues ('sugar are the building blocks'), incorrect prepositions, and persistent punctuation and capitalization errors. Run-on sentences and comma splices also occur, such as in the concluding paragraph where multiple clauses are joined without adequate punctuation. These errors require some effort from the reader to parse meaning, which aligns this performance with a band 5.0.

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