Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

From my everyday experience and observation I can totally agree with the statement that many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

First of all, I think that highiy contain of sugar products are unhealthy for human body. Such as bakery products are too sugary which are very harmful for human body. So besides, drinks, such as coca cola, 7 up, and pepsi,

are very unhealty and harmful for human body because

he's very sugary. For example, if a man got sugar patience and he drink sodas or eat highly contain products so obvsily his health to will be more damage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is severely under-length, containing only 123 words against the required 250-word minimum. This results in a heavy penalty under Task Achievement. While the writer manages to express a clear position agreeing with the prompt, the ideas are extremely limited, repetitive, and lack proper development. The arguments presented in the second paragraph are rudimentary, unsupported by detailed examples, and fail to explore the wider implications of taxing sugary products. Consequently, the response addresses the task only minimally, fulfilling the criteria for Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into an introduction and a single body paragraph, but the lack of a proper conclusion and the very short overall length mean that paragraphing is insufficient and inappropriate. There is some attempt at logical sequencing using introductory markers such as 'First of all' and 'So besides', but cohesive devices are often mechanical, inaccurate, or used inappropriately. Referencing is also weak, particularly with pronouns like 'he's very sugary' and 'his health to will be more damage', which hinders the overall flow and clarity of the message, placing this criterion at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. The writer relies on simple and inaccurate word forms, such as 'highiy contain of sugar products', 'unhealty', and 'sugar patience' instead of 'diabetes' or 'sugar patients'. There is a complete lack of less common lexical items, and word-choice errors are frequent enough to strain the reader and obscure meaning in several places. This level of lexical control corresponds strictly to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of basic structures alongside frequent and severe errors. Sentences such as 'if a man got sugar patience and he drink sodas or eat highly contain products so obvsily his health to will be more damage' demonstrate major faults in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, sentence structure, and word forms. Errors are so frequent that they constantly distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader, matching the descriptors for Band 4.0.

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