Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Foods and drinks that are highly rich in sugar which causes many health challenges should have high cost price to reduce the in-take of such products/ Foods.

In my own perspective, i believe such Foods should has a high cost price in the market to curtail the health challenges which rises from it below are my reasons that supports my opinion.

Firtsly,Governmenst should pass some rules to the manufacturing companies on the need to sell foods and drinks that are rinch in sugar at a high cost price . To illustrate this, when such laws and rules are made people who has some financial problems cant afford those foods and drinks thereby reducing the intake of such drinks and foods at a relatively portion.

Secondly, the need for Tourism and seminars classes on educating people on the dangers that may rises from the in-take of such drinks should be made madatory by the Governments in some countries telling them about the bad effects of such foods and drinks.

In conclusion when all this have been applied i belvied that will encourage people to consume less of foods that are tich in sugar intake so tabt many of us will be far from the sickness or health problems that comes from the in take of foods abd drinks that are rich in suger.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response presents a clear position regarding the taxation of sugary products. However, the length requirement has not been met, as the essay contains only 222 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum. This results in under-developed ideas and an incomplete exploration of the prompt. While the student attempts to provide reasons, such as government rules and educational seminars, the arguments lack depth and extension. According to the band descriptors, failing to meet the word count requirement limits the score for Task Achievement, as all parts of the task cannot be fully addressed within this word limit. Phrases like 'such Foods should has a high cost price' indicate a basic engagement with the prompt, but the overall development remains constrained by the brevity of the text.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays some organizational structure, utilizing paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, body points, and conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive ties and mechanical linking phrases, such as 'Firtsly', 'To illustrate this', and 'Secondly'. Paragraphing is irregular, with the main body ideas cramped and the conclusion running into a single dense block of text without proper transition. Referencing and substitution are occasionally unclear, as seen in the sentence 'when such laws and rules are made people who has some financial problems cant afford those foods'. While there is an overall attempt to structure the writing, the inadequate and sometimes inaccurate use of cohesive devices places this response within the Band 5 descriptor.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'foods', 'drinks', 'sugar', and 'high cost price'. There are several noticeable word choice errors and typos, such as 'in-take', 'rinch', 'Governmenst', and 'tich'. The student attempts less common items like 'curtail', 'manufactures', and 'financial problems', but these are accompanied by lexical inaccuracies ('cost price' instead of 'price' or 'taxation') and frequent spelling errors ('madatory', 'belvied', 'tabt', 'suger'). The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but the persistent errors in spelling and word formation cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning with the Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. For instance, the opening sentence 'Foods and drinks that are highly rich in sugar which causes many health challenges should have high cost price...' is a run-on structure laden with grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('sugar which causes', 'Foods should has', 'rises from it', 'people who has'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing commas, run-on sentences, and lowercase capitalization at the beginning of clauses ('i believe', 'Firtsly'). Frequent grammatical errors cause strain and occasional difficulty for the reader, placing this performance firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0.

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