Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Generally, There are many companies which makes juices and other food, which contains a lot of sugar in it. These processed items are made of sugar which causes your health issues and make you unfit. I agree that the sugary items should be expensived so that people will buy them less. In my opinion, government should need to employ more taxes on sugary items.
People buy juices because it is cheaper than the water. If water will be cheaper, mostly will buy the water. When we have sweet cravings we consume a lot of sugary in our body. Which destroyes our body. Soft drinks and processed food make body fatty, which changes our skin colour and our entire personality. If you are under 18 then your fat is baby fat, Meanwhile your are more than 18 than your fat is stuborn fat which will never loss frequently. Heavy weight causes your health issues like heart attack and other illness. If we will stop eating bad food like junk, soft drinks and juices we will become healthy and fit.
Government need to stop the production of bad and unhealthy foods. Make sure to bulid gyms and parks so that people will move towards parks and gyms for exercise and get healthy life. Put more taxes on sugary items so if someone try to buy will think first . Make water cheaper by taking off all taxes on it.
In conculsion, making sugary products more expensive is a good start but we want a long term and clear change, government ned to make the healthy food fresh and affordable and need to educate the citizen about the nutritions
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear stance that sugary products should be more expensive through taxation, and provides supporting arguments such as the affordability of water versus sugary drinks and health implications. However, the development of ideas tends to be superficial and over-generalized, as seen in simplistic assertions like 'Soft drinks and processed food make body fatty'. While all parts of the task are touched upon, the main ideas lack the depth and extension required for higher bands. The conclusion reiterates the stance appropriately, but overall, the task response sits comfortably at Band 5.0 due to limited and under-developed ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays some structural organization with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but there is a distinct lack of clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is somewhat erratic; for instance, the second paragraph abruptly jumps from pricing to skin color, fat types, and health issues. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or inaccurate, such as using 'Meanwhile' inappropriately as a transition word or omitting necessary pronouns. Referencing is occasionally unclear, which disrupts the flow of the text and requires the reader to work harder to follow the writer's line of reasoning. This corresponds to a Band 5.0 score for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, utilizing terms like 'bad food', 'unhealthy foods', and 'health issues' multiple times. There are several noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'expensived' instead of 'more expensive', 'employ more taxes' instead of 'impose more taxes', and 'loss frequently' instead of 'lose easily'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'processed items' and 'nutritions', inaccuracies cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the lexical range from scoring higher than Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic compound forms. Attempts at complex sentences frequently result in faulty structures and punctuation errors, such as sentence fragments and run-on constructions ('When we have sweet cravings we consume a lot of sugary in our body. Which destroyes our body.'). Errors are frequent throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('companies which makes') and incorrect verb tenses/forms ('government should need to employ'). These errors cause frequent strain and difficulty for the reader, aligning with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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