Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years, use of suger rapid increased. This also started debate that, the goods which contain suger should be sale at high price this also encourage people to consume less suger. I agree with this because , suger is harmfull for human body as well as production of suger need large amount of water.

Suger is so commmon in every life. But suger is hazadeus to human body. Dut to this many people face issue like heavy weight, diebites, ect. Because of this individuals ask for rise the price of those goods with contain suger. Dut to this several people do not consume suger.

Suger come from sugercan. The demand for suger is rising day by day for the mach of demand , Farmer are using chemical, large amount of water, etc. Because of this many cities are facing a problem of water deficent as well as polluted land. therefor there are several individuals who ask for ban the sugger from manfatureed foods and drinks. Now awe can see a good example of this in india . In india many people celebrate their fastivel by sweet, because that affordable, So individual like this. india is also reconise as a dibites hub of world

So goverment should make several law for reduce use of suger. Also collect high tax from those factory who use suger in production. And start campian for spred awerness about suger.

In concultion, for the protection of public or be a healthy nation goverment must reduce or make law for use of suger in production

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear stance agreeing that sugary products should be made more expensive. Relevant main ideas are presented, such as health concerns like diabetes and environmental issues related to sugarcane farming, though some points like the environmental impact are somewhat tangential to the core question of taxation. Ideas are extended with examples, such as mentioning India, but the development remains limited and repetitive. The position is maintained throughout, fitting the Band 5 descriptor where the task is addressed, but ideas remain somewhat basic and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text attempts to use paragraphing, dividing the introduction, body points, and conclusion, although the paragraphs are often overly brief and lack internal logical flow. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and sometimes misused (for example, starting multiple sentences with 'Dut to this' or 'Suger is'). There is no clear overall progression of ideas, and referencing is frequently unclear, making the sequence of thoughts jumpy. These characteristics align closely with Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged fully coherently, though a basic structure is discernible.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous fundamental spelling errors ('suger' instead of sugar, 'harmfull', 'commmon', 'hazadeus', 'diebites', 'ect', 'deficent', 'therafor', 'manfatureed', 'awe', 'fastivel', 'reconise', 'goverment', 'campian', 'spred', 'awerness', 'concultion'). The student attempts less common items like 'hazardeous' and 'production', but the pervasive spelling mistakes and limited range cause significant strain for the reader, placing the response squarely at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The writing relies heavily on simple sentence forms and contains frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('use of suger', 'rise the price'), incorrect verb forms ('rapid increased', 'should be sale'), and faulty clause structures. Attempts at complex sentences are generally inaccurate or broken ('the goods which contain suger should be sale at high price this also encourage people'). Errors are frequent and often distort meaning, matching the Band 4 descriptor where a very limited range of structures is used with constant errors.

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