Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Manufactures want to sell their products and does not concern about common man problems. Whenever you drink and eat more than your requirements , it is going to damage your physical and mentally . Firstly, You should have some control on yourself. Alot of manufactured should test their product in addition to that they put correct number on the labels. Sugary products cause more damage than all the other item, It can leads toward a huge numbers of diease like sugar,cancer,liver problem,stomach etc.

Make the suagry products expensive so that is not affordable for everyone . whenever a person goes to shop and want to buy these product, he need to thinks about it. Should i put money in this and buy it or leaves it. As it expensive ,more people will not buy it from shops. Keep it away from people approach and they should focus on their health. Encourage people should invest on themselevs going to gym, Play differnets types of activites,sports. Going out with their friends for the non sugary products. I can share you from my real life example, in the early age i have a friends, who is slim fit before the summer. Whereas, after the summer it becames so much fat because of this , falls in the cancer after one year which brokes him internally also. I share this so that you take this example seriously and avoid these types of products.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position in favour of making sugary products more expensive, and you give a reason: higher prices may make people think twice before buying them. However, the response only partially develops the task. The discussion shifts to personal self-control, product labelling, exercise and avoiding sugary products, without explaining clearly how price increases would reduce sugar consumption or addressing possible limitations of this policy. The example about your friend is relevant in intention, but the link between weight gain and cancer is asserted rather than explained or supported. The response also falls 11 words short of the required minimum. Develop two clear reasons, explain each step in the argument, and use a more credible example to support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response begins with general concerns, then argues that higher prices could discourage purchases, and ends with a personal example. Connectors such as “Firstly,” “in addition to that,” and “Whereas” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several points are introduced without being developed, and the paragraphing does not clearly separate the main argument from supporting details. Some links are inaccurate or unclear, such as “Whereas” before the friend’s change in weight, and “I share this so that you take this example seriously” shifts abruptly into direct address. Use distinct paragraphs for your position, reasons and conclusion, and make each sentence build on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “manufactured,” “labels,” “affordable,” “sugary products,” and “health,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make meaning less clear. Examples include “common man problems,” “a huge numbers of diease,” “people approach,” and “it becames so much fat.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “sugar” as a disease in “like sugar,” where a specific condition would be clearer. Aim for accurate collocations and precise health terms, and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general words such as “products” and “people” with suitable alternatives would also make the argument more flexible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “Whenever you drink and eat more than your requirements, it is going to damage…”. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms and agreement occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to read. For example, “Manufactures want to sell their products and does not concern” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “he need to thinks” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “Make the sugary products expensive” is not clearly connected to the following clause, and punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb patterns when revising.

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