Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I disagree, as manufacturing of food and drink should be reasonable or affordable as according to target audience or the customers point of view the expensive products like food or drink are good for health or are refined precised as if you look at the coffee saleable product it is mentioned or they claim that is fine in size like it is precisely harvest.

because consumers do purchase which value the product like if they are

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state a position—“I disagree”—and attempt to connect it to affordability and consumers’ choices, so the response does address the topic to a limited extent. However, the argument is difficult to follow and does not explain clearly why making sugary products more expensive would be ineffective or unfair. The coffee example is not clearly linked to sugar or health, and no relevant supporting example is developed. The response also contains only 76 words, well below the required 250, leaving the task substantially incomplete. To strengthen your answer, explain two clear reasons for your position, support each with a relevant example, and address the proposed price increase directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you begin with your opinion and then introduce a reason with “because.” However, the ideas do not progress into a clear argument. The long opening sentence combines affordability, customers’ views, product quality, and coffee without showing how these points relate. The unfinished ending, “because consumers do purchase which value the product like if they are,” leaves the reader without a complete final idea. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons, and conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main point. Clear links such as “One reason is…” and “For example…” would help guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “manufacturing,” “customers,” “expensive,” and “health,” and you attempt more specific wording such as “precisely harvest.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unclear, which makes the intended meaning hard to understand. “Refined precised” does not clearly describe a food or drink product, while “coffee saleable product” is an awkward phrase. The vocabulary range is also difficult to demonstrate in such a short response. Aim for precise, natural expressions related to the question, such as “sugary products,” “price increase,” “consumer demand,” and “health risks,” and check that each phrase conveys the meaning you intend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas using clauses, for example in “as according to target audience or the customers point of view,” but the sentence structure is not controlled enough to make the relationships clear. The opening sentence runs on through several ideas, and the final clause is incomplete. There are also problems with articles and possessives, as in “the customers point of view,” and with sentence boundaries and punctuation, including the lowercase “because” after a full stop. These issues frequently obscure meaning. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas with accurate conjunctions. Check each sentence for a clear subject, verb, and finished thought.

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