Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few people think that the best to avoid smoking is to banned in public. However some of them say that is not working and need to more law or advance policy.

Lot of people point of view smoking is bad for our health, and you can get different kind of disease. Regarding to the expert or doctors if you always using smoke you can possible get cancer. Unfortunately even the goverment warning our society to stop using cigarette, but not working and still smoke lot of them.

Now a days our administration study how to avoid or reduce the smokers in our country. Most of the mayor today have policy of no smoking in the certain area like park, terminals, and in the public market.

For me banning smoking in the certain area is the effective to stop the smokers, becaause some of them still smoking and hide in the area that not see of our law enforcement. I think thats is not enough to force them to quit in the smoke we need more policy and law regarding to the smokers. For example if the user caught of our law enforcement or police patrol the user need to pay thier penalty and secondly, our goverment need to banning in the store selling cigarette or vape. Our police cunduct operation to sure thats no store selling cigarette.

To summary for me the best way to avoid or to stop smoking is, think that our health is more important than our bad hobby. because of that kind of thinking you can stop smoking by your self.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear personal view that public-place bans are useful but insufficient, and you suggest penalties and restrictions on cigarette sales. These are relevant responses to the question. However, the discussion of the opposing view is only briefly introduced: the opening mentions making smoking illegal in public, but the essay does not explain in detail how such bans discourage smoking or what benefits they bring. Your reasons are also under-developed; for example, the claim that people hide from enforcement is not clearly connected to how a ban works. The conclusion shifts towards personal motivation and health, rather than drawing together the two views. Develop both sides more evenly and support each proposal with a clear explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for health concerns, current public-area policies, your opinion, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Some linking expressions, such as “However,” “For example,” and “To summary,” also signal relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression is not consistently clear: the health paragraph does not directly develop the debate about public bans, and the final paragraph introduces self-motivation without linking it to the earlier policy proposals. Connections within sentences are sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in “I think thats is not enough to force them to quit in the smoke.” Use a clearer sequence—first explain the case for public bans, then why further measures may be needed, and finally state your judgement—and make each paragraph’s purpose explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “public market,” “law enforcement,” “penalty,” and “cigarette,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “avoid smoking is to banned,” “using smoke,” and “quit in the smoke”; these do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “goverment,” “becaause,” and “thier” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing regulation and smoking, and check whether verbs and nouns combine naturally. For instance, use “ban smoking,” “smoke cigarettes,” and “quit smoking” consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences with reasons, such as the sentence beginning “For me banning smoking…” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range of structures remains limited and errors are frequent. Verb forms and sentence construction are often faulty: “the best to avoid smoking is to banned” and “if you always using smoke you can possible get cancer” make the intended meaning less clear. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and clause formation, as in “in the certain area” and “thats is not enough.” Aim first for accurate simple sentences, then add controlled complex forms using “because,” “although,” or “if.” Proofread each sentence for a clear subject, a correctly formed verb, and complete clauses.

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