Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

mijority of the people they are agree the smooking will be bane on public palce because it make the other people uncomfort mostly people they dont like the smooking and some of them they have the smoke alergery so that way they are in the favore of banning in ublic place instead of public place they say its also bane in our country because they are very adducited of smooking youth are the wealth of our country and smoking have so many kind like pood vape cigreate etc its the inital stage of any drug due to smooking our youth is going on the wrong way as well as few of the people they destory their life as well as their home due to addition of drug smooking make the reason of any drug addition those they lost their loving family member they say that it would be band on the other side of the people they say that it doesnt effect own our health they defend the smooking because they are also adducted so they defend the smooking aslo they have own smoking bussiness they are earning well so thats why they say such kind of thing also they said that no one will missguide others children if they want to make smoker they will become into the chelter they have the mind set envirnment doest effect i have the point of view i think it would be bane on public placeses if any one to smook they can do but own personal place i have so many example smooking destory alot of houses its make the basic reason of any drug addition even they lost their life due to drug if any one become drug adducted it would be very difficult to come back on normal life so thats why i am also in the favor of banning in public plases

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views regarding the banning of smoking in public places and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited by the lack of clear structure and paragraphing. The arguments are somewhat repetitive, focusing heavily on the link between smoking and drug addiction without fully exploring the 'other measures' mentioned in the prompt. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack depth and logical progression, often relying on generalizations. To improve, you should organize your essay into distinct paragraphs for each viewpoint and your own opinion, ensuring each point is supported by a clear, logical explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often strung together with 'and' or 'so', rather than using linking words to show contrast or consequence (e.g., 'however', 'furthermore', 'consequently'). The flow is disjointed, and the absence of clear transitions between the two viewpoints and your own opinion significantly impacts the readability. To improve, you must use paragraph breaks to separate your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, and incorporate a wider range of cohesive devices to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'mijority', 'bane', 'alergery', 'adducited', and 'chelter'. Many words are used incorrectly or are non-standard, such as 'pood vape' and 'public placeses'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly, and the reliance on basic, informal language hinders the overall quality of the response. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary to include more precise, academic terms related to health and social policy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Many sentences are run-on, lacking proper capitalization and full stops, which makes the text difficult to parse. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors in basic grammar (e.g., 'smoking have so many kind', 'it doesnt effect own our health') are frequent and often impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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