Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Smoking is not good for individual health and also its writen on paket nevertheless people think about it and continu a smokind indeed. Many people think about it its agins a low to smok in public place however some masis are say its not enough and more step would be take againts the smoker its needed.we will discus both view in forth coming paragraph.

Firstly, if smoking in public place its discourage its some time cause reduce the quntyty of smoker. moreover of lots of people are edict with smoking but if smoking its not allow in publicplace so people need some special place for smoking or smoking place and its help to reduce smoker quantyty. Smoking its band in public place which helps to other people becuse during smok people outhel the smok and another people who sit with smoker they inheal this smok its very husardus for people , so this rule its very effective and strong.

secondly, Another thing its not inouf to smoking band in publicplace do more strong steps againts smoking hovever its posible to cuse of people deth becuse, sny one who addict with smoke and sudenly government or helthministry takind band or another step agints smoking people adict with smok its couse to deth or anyother health issue , on the other hend , if government taking smla smal step step by step gains smoking and smoker so its more effective and smoker slowly go thru and used to with stop smoking . so government mute be taking another step againts smoking but one by one small step which proper plan to stop smoking in coumtry or would.

To Conclude, smoking illegal in public place which very effective to reduse smoker people quntity . moreover smoking band in public place its not inough but its slow proces if we need result so government take step one by one its effective to reduce smoking not taking harder steps some time its hrsadus to smoker life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views regarding smoking bans and includes a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited by significant language barriers. While the prompt is addressed, the arguments—such as the claim that sudden bans cause death—are not logically supported or clearly explained. The position is present but lacks the depth required for a higher band. To improve, you should focus on providing clearer, more logical reasoning and specific examples to support your points, ensuring that your arguments are fully developed rather than just stated.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear due to frequent errors in sentence construction and the misuse of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'on the other hend' and 'moreover' are used, but they do not always connect ideas logically. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'paket', 'agins', 'husardus', 'inouf', 'deth') and word-choice issues (e.g., 'edict' instead of 'addicted', 'quntyty' instead of 'quantity'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to health and public policy, while ensuring you use these words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the intended meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'we will discus both view in forth coming paragraph'). Punctuation is also problematic, with many run-on sentences and missing commas. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are almost always grammatically incorrect. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading your work to correct fundamental errors before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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