Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now days Society are worrie for few individual have a smoking habit in public place, while on the other hand people says find to best way so it is easly geting smoking in pulbic place

Some people says smoking should be band in publice place becuse they believe it is nagative impact on there children as well as other people who does not smoke they also sometime uncomartble for smoking smoke beucse some also beleive its effcte to their health for exp if one family go to the public place and one person do somking so there children shows and ask to there parents what this staranger do.

So On The Other hand socity member who were not favarior to smoking do not band in public place because some preson beleive if they do not somke after some time so they feel headache so if they will go to public place and after some time they do not get a smoke so they feel headache becuse is addction so its not easy to skip some time so at that time whatever the place they want to smoke for exp if some marking person travel so long and when his desination arrive after that they need cigrate so he fill relex.

as per my openion govermnet should immpiment some policy like in public place install somking cabin so if any one want to get somking they easliy go there and then do it so no one show them and also the smoke is also excust outside easliy, so its win win situation for both side

Conclusion now days people like is hectic so some people not quit smoking easly so i think if govement will think and inpimanr of this policy it will be good for all our society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the negative impact on children and the physical addiction of smokers are relevant but lack depth and are expressed in a repetitive manner. The suggestion of 'smoking cabins' is a practical solution, but the explanation of why this is better than a total ban is underdeveloped. To improve, you should aim to expand on your points with more specific reasoning or examples, ensuring that the connection between the proposed measures and the goal of discouraging smoking is more explicitly articulated.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical. Phrases like 'So On The Other hand' and 'as per my openion' are used to signal transitions, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and the referencing (e.g., 'they', 'this') is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subjects being discussed. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring each sentence logically follows the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, which restricts the expression of more complex ideas. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'worrie' for 'worried', 'band' for 'banned', 'publice' for 'public', and 'inpimanr' for 'implement'. These errors are frequent and occasionally make it difficult for the reader to grasp the intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you need to work on your spelling and expand your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to social policy and public health, rather than relying on simple, everyday language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'people says' instead of 'people say'), missing articles, and faulty sentence construction that obscures meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and a lack of proper capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high density of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence punctuation would be a good starting point for improvement.

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