Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a days,Smoking is publicily open for every one. The best to discourage the smoking is aware the public about side effect of smoking on their health.

Educate the people about the possible health issues of smoking and majorily effecting on the lungs and causing cancer in future.

It is also best to annouce smoking is illegal and should be prohabited, Goverment should charge trhe people who smokes in unauthorized area that may help in reducing the risk to other generations.

On the other hand, Smoker are increasing day by day so it is also causing major effect on new generation. Mainly smoker in our area are homeless. Goverment should work on the homeless and open the centre and orgnise a smoking cessation progaram in each city this will help in decrease the smoker population and people will avoid smoking in future if people will not see smoker around them they will not go smoke because smoking usually spread by smoking and people around us.

According to me, " Goverment should provide a separate space to smoker and to be anounce illegal in public places.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, as it is 65 words short of the 250-word minimum, which restricts the depth of the discussion. While both views regarding banning public smoking and introducing other measures are touched upon, the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For example, the suggestion to educate the public and target homeless populations is mentioned briefly without sufficient elaboration or clear examples. The writer attempts to express a position, but the conclusion is somewhat disjointed and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to expand on all parts of the prompt with well-supported explanations and meet the required word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay displays some organization, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is used, but the transitions between sentences and paragraphs feel disjointed and mechanical, such as abruptly shifting from public smoking laws to the homeless population in the fourth paragraph. Cohesive devices are either inadequate or misused, which disrupts the flow of the text. Pronoun referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. To achieve a better flow and structure, the writer should use logical transitional phrases and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-connected theme that naturally leads into the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling, such as 'publicily', 'annouce', 'prohabited', 'trhe', and 'progaram', which cause some difficulty for the reader. The range of vocabulary is narrow, heavily relying on repetitive terms related to smoking and health. While there are basic attempts to use less common words like 'prohibited' or 'cessation', inaccuracies in spelling and collocation hinder precision. To improve in this area, the writer needs to expand their range of vocabulary, pay closer attention to word forms, and carefully check spelling before submission.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex structures that turn out faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and articles, such as 'Now a days,Smoking is publicily open for every one', missing articles before health issues, and incorrect punctuation throughout. Errors in subject-verb agreement and prepositional usage also occur regularly, for example, 'Smoker are increasing' and 'charge trhe people who smokes'. These persistent mistakes can cause difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer must focus on mastering basic sentence construction, improving subject-verb agreement, and correctly employing complex grammatical patterns.

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