Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Few masses say that the best way to discourage smoking is to smoking illegal in public placesa and other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed because they want good health for all humanity so this is good thought for all of us . I will discuse about it below in up coming paraghraph.

To commence with, These days many people are smoking in the public area which is very illegal in public places. In other words, These habits is not good for all commiunity. Goverment need to if anyone need to smoke in public area then need to build the smoke box where any person go in the box then can smoke inside. For instance, The america goverment that many smoke box in the many city where people want to smoke but they do not smoke in the public place there are spacial box where people can smoke without public disturbens. Hence, Many people are smoking within the childhood time any now they can not stop quickly if they people say the best way smoke illegal in public places this is not good idea.

Furthermore, These days many people are facing much more problem in life related the job and money. To elaborate this, These problem they do not fouse on their life and they smoke many time in life and other people say that this is not enough and other measures are need in country. For example, The goverment need build new center where people can stop this bad habit.

In conclusion, The smoking is illegal or legal but is not good our life and for others

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally, which places it at this band level. Importantly, the length requirement is NOT met: the student's response contains 242 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum, with 33 words copied directly from the prompt left uncounted. The student attempts to discuss both views regarding smoking in public places, but the ideas remain very limited and under-developed. For instance, the prompt asks to discuss both views and give an opinion, but the writer merely touches upon banning smoking and introducing 'smoke boxes' without fully exploring the arguments. Furthermore, the position is not always clear, and the conclusion is extremely abrupt and fails to summarise the main arguments effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Information and ideas show some basic organisation, but they are not arranged coherently throughout the response. While the writer attempts to use transitional markers such as 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion', the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by confusing statements and poor referencing. Paragraphing is attempted, but the paragraphs contain disjointed thoughts, such as mixing the idea of smoke boxes with childhood habits and job problems. Repetitive phrasing and mechanical cohesive devices are evident, which hinders the overall flow and logical progression of the essay.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent errors that strain the reader's understanding. The student relies heavily on simple words and phrases, and attempts at less common vocabulary often result in noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and form, such as 'Few masses' instead of 'Some people', 'commiunity', and 'public disturbens'. Spelling errors are also present throughout the text, including 'Goverment', 'fouse', and 'paraghraph'. These lexical limitations mean the vocabulary is only minimally adequate for the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, relying primarily on simple sentence structures, while attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. Errors are frequent and often distort meaning, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message. There are persistent issues with verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as in the opening sentence 'to smoking illegal in public placesa' and 'These habits is not good'. Punctuation and preposition use within grammatical patterns also show frequent inaccuracies throughout the text.

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