Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal in public places. Other people say that this is not enough and that other measures are needed.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is moot issue people nowadays days are taking drugs.some people think that only way smoking should be banned on public places, while other it is enough as well other solution also important. I stand with latter view point.

on the one hand, it is only way to make something illegal in public place if government want to discourage cigarate.

It is because , government should ban on smoking when they take cigrate on public places. For example , In the modern era , many people are talking cigrate on railway station,bus stand.As a result, people faces danger disease. They face problem take breath properly. morever, this method create fear in people mind due to they think

twice take cigrete at public places.

However ,I along with other who think that drugs other methods also significant to tackle this issue. first and the foremost is that, government should start awareness campaign for public to make aware public regarding hazaridical effect of smoking.For instances, government must visit in cities

provide knowledge about using of smoking many disease create such as cancer, asthma, dipression. It is not only responsibility of government but also school should organise debate competition, painting and drawing competition. lastly, government must banned on movies and TV shows which allure to public tacking drugs.owing to this,most of young generation these days follow celebrate there foot print.they like to became.if censer broad should bann show these .due to people reduce take smoke.

In conclusion, Although it is only way discorage smoking to make illegal public places, other way also imperstive to mitigate issue such as awareness campaign

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views—making smoking illegal in public places versus needing additional measures—and provides a clear position in favour of the latter. However, the development of ideas remains limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion on awareness campaigns and banning movies mentions valid points like education and media influence, but these points are supported with general assertions rather than extended examples. While all parts of the task are touched upon, the lack of thorough elaboration keeps the response at this level. To move further, the writer needs to present fully developed ideas with specific, well-supported arguments and explanations for each viewpoint discussed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation with attempts at paragraphing, but the essay lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the frequent use of transitional phrases like 'For example' and 'first and the foremost' which do not always connect ideas smoothly. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making the flow disjointed in places. The conclusion attempts to summarise the main point, but overall, the logical links between sentences and paragraphs need strengthening. To improve, the writer should ensure that cohesive devices are used more naturally and accurately, and that each paragraph flows logically into the next to guide the reader through a well-structured argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic ideas about smoking and public bans. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form throughout the text, such as 'moot issue', 'hazaridical effect', 'dipression', and 'censer broad'. These lexical inaccuracies and spelling errors sometimes cause difficulty for the reader and impede smooth communication. Attempts to use less common vocabulary often result in unnatural phrasing. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range, pay closer attention to correct word forms and spelling, and ensure that vocabulary is chosen with accurate collocation and stylistic appropriateness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and awkward verb forms, such as 'people faces danger disease' and 'government must banned on movies'. These frequent errors often cause difficulty for the reader and occasionally obscure the intended meaning. To progress, the writer needs to produce a greater variety of complex structures with improved accuracy, paying careful attention to basic sentence architecture, verb tenses, and grammatical patterns.

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