Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argued that people should not eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. I disagree with this opinion therer are siveral reasons.

Firstly main reason is that our body need energy and protien and we can get benifiets from animals meat. Meat is full source of protien and God has made these few animals for human to eat their meat and become strong and healthy. Secondly in few earas there is a shortage of food For example deserat eara there is shortage of food and vagitables due to dryness Therefor peaple eat meat to serviev.

One the other hand some peolple belive that raising animals for human consumption is cruel because animals deserve to live freely but if human dont eat thmen other animals will eat them for example loin eat goats rabits and other animals they are not save in wildelife therefore it is better to eat by human some people do not eat meat due to cruelty they belive it is not good to kill animal for their hunger but mostly people like to eat meat fish is best source of megnicuieam every animal has its benifets and God has made these all for humans if people donot eat them then there will be shortage of food and plants vagetable are also livingthing fruits and vegatables are also benificial for humans.

In conclusion people should never eat meat because raising for human consumption is cruel i am totaly disagree with this opinion because animals are for human being to take advantages from them God has create all the things for human to take advantages from them so there is not cruelty to kill them and eat their meat becaus our body need them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear disagreement in the opening and conclusion, and you give relevant reasons, including nutrition and food scarcity in dry regions. However, the response addresses the issue only partially because several claims are asserted rather than explained. For example, saying that God made animals for people to eat does not establish why eating meat is ethically acceptable, and the comparison with predators eating goats and rabbits does not fully answer whether human farming is cruel. The point about animals’ freedom is acknowledged, but its implications are not explored. Develop fewer arguments with specific explanation or examples, and keep the position consistent: the conclusion repeats the prompt’s opposing view before saying you disagree. The stated length requirement is met; 10 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, reasons supporting your view, a counterargument, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “On the other hand” help signal the intended direction. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow, especially in the long third paragraph, where animal welfare, predators, food shortages, and the value of vegetables are joined without clear links. Some transitions are inaccurate or confusing, and the conclusion begins by repeating the opposing opinion before reversing direction. Use shorter paragraphs, give each one a single main purpose, and connect each supporting example directly to its claim. Clearer referencing and fewer loosely connected points would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “human consumption,” “shortage of food,” “cruel,” and “source of protein,” so the reader can identify the main subject and your basic arguments. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “animals,” “human,” and “advantages.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “protien,” “benifiets,” “deserat,” and “vagitables,” make reading less fluent. Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, for example “full source of protein” and “fish is best source of megnicuieam.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing precise collocations; avoid relying on broad claims such as “animals are for human being” when a more specific expression can convey your point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, using forms such as “because” and “if.” However, the range is limited, and longer sentences often become difficult to interpret because clauses are joined without reliable punctuation or grammatical control. Examples include “I disagree with this opinion therer are siveral reasons” and “if human dont eat thmen other animals will eat them.” There are recurring problems with subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “our body need” and “every animal has its benifets.” These errors sometimes obscure relationships between ideas. Practise writing complete sentences, checking agreement and articles, and separating independent clauses with full stops or appropriate conjunctions.

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