Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people suggest that humans should avoid raising animals for eating purposes, because this is considered a cruel activity. I agree with this statement and i will support my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

People who think killing animals for eating is a illegal action is true as it shows that everybody has a right to live their life and animals are also part of our world. Why they should be killed for consumption? Instead people can use them as pets, which is a reasonalbe choice to use their products for human consumption such as milk and eggs. Therefore, people should not cross limit to kill an animals for their own benefits.

Moreover, Many of the animal breeds has disappreaed due to human consumption. Mainly sea animals which are at extinct. These should be raised not killed. Eating animals meat can cause extinction if not saved them. In future, it can cause some problems because many animals helping to protect environment, providing a few sources for agriculture. This will not only extinct animals from the earth but also effect the environment and agriculture.

Many researches has provided information about the nutrional value from natural resources such as plants, vegetables, and fruits.There are alots of people who think only meat consumption can provide essential nutrients, however few food researchers discovered that it can put negative effects because people are using many medical substances to raise animals such as oxytocin to make them grow early than their natural growth. This can remove the nutrients from meat or even from any other products that animals provide. So it is not a wise choice to raise animals using substances and then eating their products.

In conclusion, although it is considered animal meat healthy however, to use them for personal reaons this trend should not be followed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I agree”) and remains consistent in the conclusion. You give several relevant reasons: animals have a right to live, some species face extinction, and intensive animal raising may affect food quality. These points address the opinion, but they are not all developed equally. The argument about extinction is asserted broadly without a specific example or explanation of how meat consumption causes it, while the discussion of animal medicines introduces a potentially relevant concern but does not clearly connect it to the claim that eating meat is cruel. To strengthen the response, explain each main reason with a concrete example and address the opposing view—for instance, why animal welfare concerns outweigh the nutritional benefits of meat.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, three body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally focus on distinct points, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Therefore,” and “In conclusion” help signal progression. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The shift from animals being kept as pets to using their milk and eggs is difficult to follow, and “These should be raised not killed” does not clearly identify which animals “these” refers to. The conclusion also repeats the position without drawing together the reasons. Use clearer referencing, make the relationship between each sentence explicit, and ensure each paragraph develops one central argument in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “consumption,” “extinction,” “nutritional value,” and “essential nutrients,” and you attempt some less common terms. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make ideas less precise. Examples include “a illegal action,” “reasonalbe choice,” “many animal breeds has disappreaed,” and “effect the environment,” where the intended meaning is not always expressed naturally. Phrases such as “animals meat” and “medical substances to raise animals” also need more precise wording. Build a reliable set of topic collocations—such as “animal welfare,” “species at risk of extinction,” and “intensive farming”—and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make your arguments clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a question for emphasis and clauses introduced by “because” and “although.” The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation reduce accuracy. For example, “Many of the animal breeds has disappeared” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “a illegal action” uses the wrong article. In “although it is considered animal meat healthy,” the clause structure is difficult to follow. Capitalisation and spacing after full stops are also inconsistent. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, article use, and complete clause structure, then proofread each sentence. More accurate control of these patterns would support your attempts at complex sentences.

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