Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Meat is very essential for our health. We get more protein form animal bt some people thinks People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.

Yes sometimes animals bear pain can they pain sorrows like as people's. Animals also feel sorrows. Bt some companies who supply meat sometimes they don't see animal pain they just want profits. They keeps animal in the cage sometimes they don't eat animal properly. Animals also wants their freedom they also wants peace. Some boiler chicken farms we can see they don't have enough place for produce eggs. Sometimes people feeds them more for gain animals weight. We should care about animals its our moral responsibility. Bt we can get enough protein from meats other than vegetables. So we have to eat animals meats bt also take care animals. Its our moral responsibility.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a position that animals should be treated better but that people may still eat meat, especially in “we have to eat animals meats bt also take care animals.” You also give relevant points about pain, confinement and profit-driven farming. However, the response addresses the opinion only minimally: the reasons for eating meat are not clearly explained, and the claim that meat is essential is not supported or compared with alternatives. The discussion is brief and ideas are not developed with specific examples. The response contains 130 words, so it is 120 words below the required minimum; 13 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop both your position and supporting reasons in a fuller response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response moves from the nutritional value of meat to animal suffering and then to a conclusion that people may eat meat while caring for animals. This gives the reader a basic sense of the intended argument. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the progression between them is difficult to follow. For example, “Bt we can get enough protein from meats other than vegetables” appears to introduce a contrast, but its meaning is unclear and the next sentence does not explain it. Repeated use of “Bt” and “also” does little to show how points relate. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons and conclusion, and connect each point with clear, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “protein,” “profits,” “cage,” “freedom” and “moral responsibility,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or forms make ideas unclear, such as “boiler chicken farms,” “animal pain” and “animals weight.” Repetition of “animals,” “sometimes” and “also” further limits precision. Spelling and informal forms such as “bt” and “people thinks” also reduce the accuracy and appropriateness of the vocabulary. Aim for more precise expressions, for example, “broiler chicken farms,” “animal suffering” and “increase the animals’ weight,” and vary repeated terms where possible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate several simple ideas using short sentences, and some basic sentence patterns are understandable, such as “Animals also feel sorrows.” However, the range of structures is very limited, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “some people thinks,” “They keeps animal,” and “they don't eat animal properly.” The sentence “Bt we can get enough protein from meats other than vegetables” is also structurally unclear. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and plural forms, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses, such as “Although some farms provide poor conditions, consumers can choose meat from farms with higher welfare standards.”

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