Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some People believe that It is very cruel for individuals to eat meat of raising animals for consumption as food. I consider it as partially agree and disagree with the statement. The one side is that animals meat consider as good nutrious food for protein, Vitamin B12 and many more while on the other side human have no right to kill the other living animals.

Initially, the paramount importance of eating meat is directly associated with the nutrious diet. Human body needs different nutrition like protein, vitamins, minerals and so on. Some nutrition can get from vegetables and plants while others only from animals like fish, poultary meat and eggs, beef are the examples that human raise them in their farm and sell and eat the meat. To illustrate, Vitamin B12 only get from meat and chicken there is no alternative for this, so people have no option they have to eat meat for fullfill their nutrition deficiency. One of example that I heard about Indian womens who are vegetarian have a deficiency of Vitamin B12.

Therefore, No one have the right to kill other animals for their own purpose and benefit which is the cruelty especially after raising them. For example, if a lion hunts a deer that known as chain of food. Food chain is important to make balance of nature, but killing for consumption as food is a heartless thing, human have several alternative of meat like cereal, lentils, spinach, fruits, vegetables are a good source of energy and food.

Ultimately, eating chicken and meat is good for health and body however killing someone for own benefit is not good at all, Human should use the alternative of meat where they could which help to reduce the overcosumption of animal meat.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the question and state a qualified position: “I consider it as partially agree and disagree.” The discussion of nutrition, including protein and vitamin B12, gives a relevant reason for eating meat, while the point that humans should not kill animals for their own benefit supports the opposing view. However, the position is not fully clear: the conclusion says meat is “good for health” but also recommends alternatives, without explaining when eating meat is justified or how this balances the cruelty concern. The claim that vitamin B12 has “no alternative” is also too absolute and needs qualification or support. Develop the ethical argument further and make your final degree of agreement explicit and consistent with the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph presenting nutritional benefits, another presenting the ethical objection, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “Initially,” “Therefore,” and “Ultimately” help readers follow the broad direction. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “The one side” and “on the other side” introduce the contrast, but the relationship between the two positions is not resolved in the conclusion. Within the first body paragraph, the examples and the claim about vitamin B12 move quickly from general nutrition to a specific group without a clear link. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, connect examples explicitly to that point, and make the conclusion synthesize the two arguments rather than simply repeat them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “nutrition,” “protein,” “Vitamin B12,” “food chain,” “cruelty,” and “alternative.” These terms make the subject clear, and phrases such as “balance of nature” show an attempt to use more specific language. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, word forms, and spelling are noticeable: “nutrious diet,” “poultary meat,” “fullfill their nutrition deficiency,” and “overcosumption” weaken precision. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “animals meat consider as good” and “a heartless thing.” Aim to learn vocabulary in complete collocations and check spelling and word forms. More precise phrasing would help distinguish nutritional necessity from personal preference and animal welfare.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the contrast in “Some nutrition can get from vegetables and plants while others only from animals” and the example introduced by “To illustrate.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, some errors in sentence formation and grammatical control remain. For example, “Human body needs different nutrition” is missing an article, while “Vitamin B12 only get from meat” has an incorrect verb form and lacks a clear subject. Agreement is also inconsistent in “No one have the right,” and several sentences join independent ideas with commas, as in “...a heartless thing, human have several alternative.” Improve article use, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries, while retaining attempts at complex structures.

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