Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this world is a place where everyone is in need of each other. we cant live without trees, if we dont give water to trees, trees will die. humans have their desires in this world. even if we dont eat meat in our life still we will live in this world. but, here weak always gets hunt by powerful. we slaughter chickens, fishes, goats, cows and other animals for our daily desires. some people belive on religions but some not. in religion it is halal to slaughter animals for their need, but are some restrictions on some animals. like in islam they cant eat pig meat or dead animals meat. there is huge difference between animals and humans. humans have consciousness they can sense whats good or bad for them but animals aren't. even if we kill them they don't understand what is killing. in this world there are herbivores who depends on green plants, there are carnivores who only depends on meat, and some are omnivores who can eat both plants and meat like us humans. carnivore animals depends only on meat. for that reason if dont hunt how will they live. so its in the nature of the world everyone depends on each other.i agree on it that it is not cruelty to raise animals for human consumption. there animals who can hunt humans for their daily food, but still humans admire them the most. so it is normal in this world sometimes weak get hunt by powerful and sometimes powerful can be hunted vy weak.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position against the claim, stating that raising animals for food is not cruel, and you give relevant supporting points about food chains, human diets, and religious practices. However, the response only partly addresses the central issue: it explains that animals hunt one another and that humans eat different foods, but does not clearly examine whether the way humans raise and slaughter animals causes suffering. The claim that animals do not understand killing is also asserted rather than supported, and the religious example is not connected closely to cruelty. To develop the response, explain what humane or cruel treatment involves, then support your position with a specific example and acknowledge a counterargument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable line of thought, moving from dependence in nature to animal diets and then to your opinion. Some linking words, such as “for that reason” and “so,” show attempts to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so its main points and conclusion are difficult to distinguish. Several ideas are placed beside one another without a clear relationship—for example, the discussion of religious rules shifts abruptly to human consciousness and then to carnivores. Repeated use of “there are” and “but” also makes the progression feel repetitive. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one central point with clear links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related words, including “slaughter,” “consciousness,” “herbivores,” “carnivores,” and “omnivores,” which helps communicate your ideas about animals and food. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and several word-choice and spelling errors make parts harder to understand. For example, “weak always gets hunt by powerful” and “daily desires” do not express your meaning naturally; “belive” and “vy” are also misspelled. Some phrases, such as “depends on green plants,” are repeated rather than varied. Aim for precise terms related to animal welfare, such as “animal suffering,” “livestock farming,” and “humane treatment,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses with “even if,” “who,” and “but,” showing an effort to go beyond simple statements. However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation and basic grammar sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “we cant live without trees,” “if dont hunt how will they live,” and “there is huge difference between animals and humans.” Subject–verb agreement and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “carnivore animals depends” and “weak get hunt.” Capitalisation and punctuation are often missing, especially at sentence beginnings and after full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking subjects, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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