Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Individuals have to avoid to eating chicken and mutton because growing wildlife for people food is heartless. I disagree with the given statement to a large extent because having meal of meat has many benefit for medical purpose also in some religion have to celebrate their festival day by making and eating meat.

For most argument to support my opinion is that eating meat have numerous advantage in terms of vitamins and other medical purpose. This is because if certain people eat meat because they have required for there body to fight with some diseases. Also from scientifically meat have more proteins compared to any other vegetables. For example, if someone have problem of limited b 12 in body then doctor suggest to eat chicken or beef.

Another reason to prove my point is that many religions have festival of animals. Because Muslims people have to celebrate Eid day festival in a year. So, they raise animal from a birth of the wildlife, they have to do in terms of traditional celebration. Therefore, they have making meat food to enjoy their special day. Such as biryani, karahi , kabab also barbecue etc.

However, heartless consumption of meat in people are very common so they have their kindness towards of nature. To explain my point animals have their life of freedom and have to grow of wild life have many benefit in earth too. Although having meat have more nutrition for human, vegetables also have more more benefit to consume in daily life.

In conclusion, despite the fact of wildlife have to save their life for nature and human development but having more advantage to eat meat for people are logically acceptable. Therefore, I think in my opinion individual have to eat meat for medical purpose.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against the statement. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention medical benefits and religious practices, the arguments are not fully extended. For instance, the point about Vitamin B12 is relevant but lacks depth. The final paragraph introduces a counter-argument about animal welfare that is slightly confusing and contradicts your earlier stance, making the overall position feel less cohesive. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that directly supports your thesis without introducing conflicting information in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, phrases like 'For most argument to support my opinion' and 'Also from scientifically' are awkward and do not effectively link ideas. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between 'wildlife' and 'human development' is vague. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'nevertheless') and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is often repetitive and imprecise. You frequently use basic terms like 'meat' and 'eat' and struggle with collocations, such as 'growing wildlife' instead of 'raising livestock' or 'making meat food'. There are also instances of word-choice errors, such as 'heartless' instead of 'cruel' or 'unethical'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to ethics, nutrition, and cultural traditions, and pay closer attention to how words are combined in natural English phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'eating meat have'), incorrect preposition use, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'if someone have problem of limited b 12'). Articles are also frequently missing or misused. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex structures.

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