Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Undeniably, group of persons should not eat meat came from animals, because raising them for feeding generations can be a part of cruelty. With this statement, i am strongly agree with it. This essay will discuss the consequences in the former paragraph.

To commence with first and foremost reason is, right to live freely because animals also have emotions and feelings. To explain this, as compared to human beings , animals are unable to express their feelings towards others. So that, everyone should respect pets, wild living beings and etcetera. For instance, there has been updated a study in UK that shows lack of wild lives can effect nature, so everyone has a right to live in this world.

The other reason is that increasing diseases. to explain this, eating animal meat sometimes kept a virus in human body and that effect their health. Because of this reason people not only get sick but also they have to face many health issues. To exemplify this, in India study shows that people who are non-vegetarian faced a lot of health problems and every year they have to visit the doctor. That is why, becoming a vegetarian is essential to protect the animals as well as their own well-being.

To conclude this, although some people prefer to eat chicken, mutton, meat yet they face major problems in their own body. People should have stop to eat animals to protect their lives as well. Every individual have right to protect animals , because they are also living beings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of the statement. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding animal rights and health risks are introduced but lack depth and logical support. For instance, the claim that 'eating animal meat sometimes kept a virus in human body' is vague and lacks a clear explanation or credible evidence. The essay tends to over-generalize, and the connection between the points and the prompt is sometimes tenuous. To improve, you should provide more specific, well-reasoned arguments and ensure that each point directly supports your main position with clear, logical progression.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often mechanical. While cohesive devices like 'To commence with' and 'To conclude this' are used, they are sometimes used incorrectly or feel forced. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the consequences in the former paragraph,' which does not accurately describe the content of the introduction. The progression of ideas is somewhat repetitive, and the logical link between the sentences is frequently weak, making the overall structure feel disjointed. Improving the use of transition words and ensuring each sentence logically follows the previous one would enhance coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'group of persons should not eat meat came from animals' and 'raising them for feeding generations.' The use of 'etcetera' is informal and inappropriate for an academic essay. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on basic vocabulary prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on learning collocations and using more precise, academic vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every individual have right'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'People should have stop to eat animals'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and spaces. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors. Increasing your control over complex sentence structures will also help improve your score.

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