Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
some people think that eating animals in form of meat is disgusting, while other believe that it is good source of protein.however i agree with those who think its a cruel thing.
People agree that eating animals is not a good source of food, because first of all, they feed them to make them good for eating.they waste so money on them which is not useful for their future, as they waste about 2-3k in one month.some of them open farms so that they can run this business in which they waste money on it firstly they invest in it after opening it you have no guarantee that it will pay you back. another reason is the smell some people donnot like the smell of meat as it come from miles away. also animals are getting extinct all over the world which will affect our food chain a.lot
On the other hand, people think it is the best source of protein, as it contains a lot of things; people get a lot of iron from salmon and other nutrients. they think it helps them in gym a lot as they have to do excessive exercise over there so they eat. some doctors aslo ask them to eat if someone have problems in their brain stomach or they are facing some serious health issues
I believe eating meat is not good source of getting nutrients; there are various alternatives which helps them as same as meat do so if people will think about nature or climate they will stop immediately, as it will affect them in future
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but lacks depth. While you state a clear position, your arguments are underdeveloped. For instance, the point about 'wasting money' on farming is not directly relevant to the ethical argument of cruelty. The mention of 'smell' and 'extinction' is also tangential to the core debate of animal welfare. To improve, focus on the ethical implications of industrial farming, such as living conditions or the moral status of animals, rather than economic or aesthetic concerns. The conclusion is present but lacks a strong summary of your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical or disjointed. You use basic cohesive devices like 'first of all' and 'on the other hand', but the logical progression within paragraphs is weak. For example, the transition from discussing farming costs to the smell of meat is abrupt. Additionally, the lack of proper punctuation, such as missing spaces after periods and inconsistent capitalisation, makes the text difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear topic sentences would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'things'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'wasting money' instead of 'high production costs' or 'not a good source of food' instead of 'nutritionally inadequate'. You attempt to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'protein' and 'nutrients', but the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to ethics, nutrition, and environmental impact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which often impedes readability. There are persistent errors in sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing subjects. Punctuation is a major issue; you frequently omit spaces after full stops and fail to capitalise the first letter of sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used often contain errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some people donnot like'). You need to focus on basic sentence construction, punctuation, and proofreading to ensure your meaning is conveyed clearly.
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