Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Individuals should never consume meat as raising animals only for the consumption of human beings is cruelity. I am fully agree with this notion and this essay will discuss reasons behind it in upcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand, instead of eating animals as source of protein lots of similar products folks can consume for instance milk, eggs etc. Additionally, people don't know if there is any specific type of disease to that animals whom meat they are consuming which can cause serious illness to them. Regardless of that, stores keeps, meet in big refrigerators in order to keep it fresh for many of many days which is not good for individuals well being.
Moreover, animals are suffering alot as before cutting them they have to live in crowded places with other animals and its bad cruelity on them if it will be reduced than environment pollution can be controlled. one fact behind that is some species are very rare in this day and age as people are eating them.
In conclusion, although its good source of taking protein but other alternatives are also available it should be reduced.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 189 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments are presented in a very superficial manner. While you state your position clearly, the supporting points—such as the mention of disease or environmental pollution—are underdeveloped and lack specific, illustrative examples. To improve, you must expand on your reasoning by providing detailed explanations and concrete evidence for each point. The conclusion is also quite abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main arguments presented in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices. While you use transition signals like 'On the one hand' and 'Moreover', their usage is sometimes mechanical or contextually inappropriate. For instance, the transition 'Regardless of that' does not logically connect the previous sentence to the discussion about refrigerators. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a smoother flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms and occasionally misuse words, such as 'cruelity' (cruelty) and 'meet' (meat). There is a lack of precision in your word choice, which prevents you from expressing complex ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to ethics, nutrition, and environmental impact. Focus on learning the correct spelling and collocations of the words you use, as errors like 'cruelity' and 'meet' distract the reader and indicate a need for more careful proofreading.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'I am fully agree' (I fully agree), 'that animals whom meat they are consuming' (the animals whose meat they are consuming), and 'if it will be reduced than environment pollution can be controlled' (if it were reduced, environmental pollution could be controlled). These errors in verb tense, relative pronouns, and conditional structures are persistent. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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