Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I disagree that raising animals to fulfil the human need for meat for food consumption is cruel. Some may agree with this point of view.

The human requirement of meat is met by raising animals, which is the best natural resource for fulfilling human food needs. In my opinion, I believe that raising animals is essential for human food, and it does not constitute a cruel act.

On the other hand, some people think that it is long-term disadvantageous, human should not consider animals as the only source on the planet for their food consumption. They should consider plant sources as another natural source for human protein food consumption. That trend can lead to a negative impact on wildlife.

It is concluded that humans should consider both sources for human consumption not only rely on the animals other wise on long term, as it will be disadvantageous and will have a negative impact on wildlife.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 155 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth and supporting examples required for a Task 2 essay. The discussion on plant sources is brief and does not fully address the prompt's focus on the ethics of raising animals. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for full task completion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the other hand' and 'It is concluded', but they are somewhat mechanical. The logical flow between the paragraphs is weak because the arguments are not sufficiently linked to the central thesis. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph develops a single, clear idea that connects logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is repetitive, particularly the phrase 'human food consumption', which appears multiple times. The range of vocabulary is limited and lacks the precision expected at higher bands. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'long-term disadvantageous', which is not a natural collocation. To improve, try to use more varied synonyms for 'meat', 'animals', and 'consumption', and focus on learning common collocations to make your writing sound more natural and academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'human should not consider' lacks an article, and 'other wise on long term' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structures are often repetitive. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and varying your sentence structure by using more complex clauses to express your ideas more clearly.

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