Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Eating a meat is give us a protein because it is a source of protein which help us to build the muscles in the body. However, individual do not have to eat the meat because the raising animal for human consumption is dangerous. I basically agree with this statement which i going to explain in further paragraphs.

According to my opinion, I feel like people should never eat meat because the way animal are raising these days are really dangerous for human body to take. Sometime animals eat the poisonous things which comes through the meat and individuals eat those meats which make them sick. Moreover, the way meats are making these days are like infecting them with the for the puffness and for the to look meaty meat, so that people do not need to thing for second, they can just buy directly which will effecting to people after the eating the meat.

On the other hand, people should eat meat which help them to make their body healthy such as a body builders, so whenever they want to go the any competition then they can go. For example, last year in Japan a man a meat every day for selecting in the body builder competition, so he ate every day 1.5 kg a meat just to be look healthy in the selection.

In the competition he got first prize was a healthy and fit man. Hence, people like to eat the meat once a weak for the stastification or for the different taste.

In the conclusion, I totally agree that eating a meat sometime is injurious for human takes and that becomes cruel in sometime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a position, but the development is inconsistent. While you attempt to discuss both the cruelty aspect and the health implications, the arguments are often unclear or contradictory. For instance, you mention that meat is a source of protein but then argue it is dangerous, without fully reconciling these points. The ideas are somewhat repetitive, and the supporting example about the bodybuilder in Japan lacks clarity and logical connection to the main argument about animal cruelty. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that directly supports your overall stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Hence' and 'Moreover' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is frequently disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between 'poisonous things' and the conclusion is weak. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'meat', 'healthy', and 'dangerous'. There are also several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'infecting them with the for the puffness' and 'injurious for human takes'. These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to grasp your intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'livestock', 'ethical concerns', 'nutritional value', or 'industrial farming practices', and pay closer attention to how words are combined in English.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text, which often impedes communication. Common issues include incorrect article usage ('a meat', 'the meat'), subject-verb agreement ('individual do not', 'animal are raising'), and sentence structure errors ('Eating a meat is give us a protein'). While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will significantly improve the clarity and quality of your writing.

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