Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Animals are very important for our environment. they play an essential role in hole envirnmoent life.Some people should be never eat meat becuase of raising animals for human consumption in cruel. I am partially agrre with this statement which i will discuss in the upcoming paragraph as well as suitalbe conclussion at the end.

The first and foremost reason why people avoid meat is that they prefer to eat vegetarion food because they think that vegetarion food have more nutricion as campore to non vegetarion. they use to eat vegetables, curd and paneer which has more protien, vitamins and minrals. Secondly, more people follow their cultural rituals wherever they have no permission to die, eat or touch the animals. so that's why they avoid to eat meat. thirdly, meat take more time to digest as comper to healty food so that some people have no time to go for walk or exercise due to this they are overweight.

On the other hand, non vegetarion food have more calcium, vitamins and minerlas which are beneficial for our bones.For example, some individuals or yougsters who do gym for make their body they want more protien and energy which meat provide to them like eggs, chickhen . owing to this people should eat meat.

Conculssion, there are serval things why people do not like to eat meat they think meat is not good for health so that's why they aovid it. some people like it because they want storng bons for doing heavy work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument, but the development of ideas is limited. While you state you are 'partially agree', the arguments provided are somewhat generic and lack depth. For instance, the point about cultural rituals is mentioned but not explained in detail. The essay focuses more on health and nutrition than the core ethical issue of animal cruelty mentioned in the prompt. To improve, ensure that your arguments directly address the specific ethical concerns raised in the question rather than shifting the focus primarily to dietary health benefits. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully synthesize the points made.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'so that's why' and 'owing to this'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the opening paragraph contains several fragmented thoughts that make the introduction feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' would help create a smoother flow between your arguments and improve the overall logical progression of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'hole envirnmoent', 'nutricion', 'campore', 'minrals', 'conculssion', 'serval'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. You use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'nutricion', 'calcium', and 'vitamins', but the range is limited. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and attempt to use more precise collocations. For example, instead of saying 'do gym', use 'engage in strength training' or 'work out'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic synonyms will also help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'meat take more time'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'people should be never eat'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty, which can make the meaning slightly difficult to follow at times. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and article usage before moving on to more complex structures.

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