Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.in this contemporary era, some folks thinking that raising the animal for their own benefit such as eating, is cruelity. I agree with this satement at some extent. I will discuss the reason why i am not completely agree witrh this one.
The former is why am on side of this is eco system chain. To be specifiy, its the rule of environment to eat the animals, if people did not consume the animals then the ratio of animal will increse and will disturb the eco chain. moreover, people have less option of protein in their vegetarion food that why they prefred to eat animals.
If people only taking care of the animals like cow, pig and other for their food then its consider as cruel because animals also want to live their lives freely
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response sits at a lower level because it responds to the task only minimally. First, the length requirement is not met; the essay contains only 135 words, well short of the 250-word minimum, with an additional 40 words copied directly from the task prompt that were not counted. Furthermore, the content is severely underdeveloped. While the writer attempts to present a partial agreement position, the ideas are extremely limited and sketchy. For instance, the argument regarding the ecosystem chain and protein options is mentioned briefly without proper extension, examples, or clear logical support, leaving the prompt only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The writing demonstrates some basic organization, but lacks a clear overall progression. The response is divided into brief paragraphs, but the logical flow between ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either inadequate or misused, such as the abrupt transition into 'The former is why am on side of this...' and the mechanical sequencing. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Paragraphing is also disrupted, with prompt instructions included inline and ideas compressed awkwardly rather than developed in distinct, well-structured blocks.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic thoughts. The student uses very basic and repetitive vocabulary throughout the response, alongside noticeable errors in word choice and word form, such as 'cruelity' instead of cruelty, and 'vegetarion' instead of vegetarian. There are also collocational awkwardnesses like 'eco system chain' and 'ratio of animal'. These errors and the restricted vocabulary range cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher level of precision and stylistic awareness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Grammatical control is characterized by a very limited range of structures and frequent errors. The student relies heavily on simple sentence forms, and attempts at complex sentences are consistently faulty, as seen in 'some folks thinking that raising the animal... is cruelity' and 'i am not completely agree witrh this one.' There are frequent errors in verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text—such as missing articles and incorrect auxiliary usage. These persistent errors can cause difficulty and strain for the reader in understanding the intended meaning.
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