Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

From the past few centuries animal meat consumtion raising rapidly among the world. because of the animal crualty incrediblay ecalarating. Personally, I partially agree with this statment there are espact behind that.

To begin with, human population graph incresing like rocket. due that land of agriculture land also taken for living in this curcamestance food production day by day going lower in this situaton people find conveinent way to fulfill there basic food needs. Secondly, global climate isssues make high impact on agriculture site this major negetive effect made on farmer as well as governemnt policy extream weather condition leads less food production. in this reson people move to eat meat.

On the other hand,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a position—“I partially agree”—and give reasons related to population growth, pressure on agricultural land, and climate impacts on food production. These points show an attempt to explain why people may turn to meat. However, the response only addresses the cruelty argument indirectly and does not explain whether or when raising animals is cruel, or develop the opposing side of your partial agreement. The final paragraph begins “On the other hand,” but contains no argument, so your position is not supported across both sides of the question. The response is also 135 words below the required minimum, leaving the task substantially incomplete. Develop both sides, explain your view clearly, and support each main point with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening states your view, followed by a paragraph introduced with “To begin with” and “Secondly.” These markers help signal the order of your reasons. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences, and links such as “due that” and “in this reson” do not clearly show the relationship between claims. The unfinished “On the other hand,” also leaves the structure incomplete and creates no contrast. Use separate paragraphs for each main argument, make the connection between cause and result explicit, and complete the opposing argument before concluding.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “human population,” “food production,” “global climate issues,” and “extreme weather condition.” This gives the reader a general sense of your subject. However, spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations are frequent enough to make parts difficult to understand, as in “animal crualty incrediblay ecalarating” and “agriculture land.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “people find convenient way” and “move to eat meat.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “animal cruelty is increasing,” “agricultural land,” and “turn to meat as a food source” to express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining how population growth and climate conditions affect food production. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or incorrectly formed, and this frequently makes the relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “From the past few centuries animal meat consumption raising rapidly” and “due that land of agriculture land also taken for living”; these need complete clauses with appropriate subjects, verbs, and tense forms. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention, particularly the lowercase sentence beginnings after full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using clear grammatical links. This will help you express your reasoning without losing the reader.

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