Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Aceadmic studies plays an important role in students life but physical classes can not be negelected.i will discuss both the views in next paragraphs.

the first the foremost is Growth. While going to physical classes . children's learn different aspects of life as if they perform any group activity together it will make learn how to work in the team and it will also boost their confidence. moreover it keeps you fit and healthy . for example- if they kids go to play football there he will learn how to do team work as they will make collective decisions where they can learn about different aspects of different thinkings.while going some physical studies it also helps in giving relief from mental stress as when you study variety of subejects you fell burden so mind is exhausted.

on the other hand, Aceadmic studies also plays vital role as you learn about history, geography and many other curriculams that helps to gain more knowledge about the world. more knowledge means that you will be getting more grades that means later in higher studies you will find good oppertutunies in good universities or colleges as this thimgd also helps when you find job for yourself.

overall, both acdemic and physical studies have their pros and cons as both provides improtant knowledge in students learning. so institutes should help the tutors that they should tell the students on how to manage both the classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both sides of the question and give a general conclusion that schools should help students manage both types of classes. The examples about teamwork, fitness and academic opportunities are relevant. However, the discussion is only partially developed: the benefits of physical education receive more explanation, while the academic side is mainly a list of subjects and possible outcomes. Your own opinion is also not clearly stated until the conclusion, and it remains broad rather than explaining how schools should balance the subjects. The response is 10 words below the required minimum, so it does not meet the task’s length requirement. Develop each view with a specific example and state your position clearly in the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on physical education, a contrasting paragraph on academics, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “on the other hand” and “overall” help signal the main stages of the discussion. However, progression within sentences is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the football example, where several ideas are joined together without clear boundaries. The opening phrase “the first the foremost” is also an unclear transition, and the conclusion repeats the general idea that both subjects matter rather than drawing the discussion together more precisely. Use clearer topic sentences and divide long explanations into shorter, logically connected sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “team work,” “confidence,” “mental stress,” “higher studies,” and “opportunities.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “different aspects of different thinkings” and “good opportunities in good universities.” Spelling errors, including “Aceadmic,” “negelected,” and “oppertutunies,” are noticeable and can make reading less smooth. Some words are also repeated, especially “learn,” “good,” and “helps.” Build a more precise range of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe academic study as developing knowledge and physical education as promoting wellbeing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if they kids go to play football” and a reason clause introduced by “as.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries and verb forms occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For example, “Aceadmic studies plays” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “children's learn” uses an unnecessary possessive form. The sentence beginning “While going to physical classes” is also incomplete as written. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and a clearly attached supporting clause, then check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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