Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

PEOPLE NOWADAYS ARE HAVING DIFFERENT AND OPPOSITE THINKING ABOUT PHYSICAL EDUCATION. SOME BELIEVE THAT IT SHOULD BE A PART OF SCHOOL EDUCATION IN EARLY AGE. WHILE OTHERS ARE CONCERN THAT THERE A LOT MORE TO LEARN COMPARED TO PHYSICAL EDUCATION. I WILL DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND SHARE MY OPINION.

TO BEGIN WITH, PHYSICAL HEALTH HAS BECOME CRUCIAL AROUND THE WORLD. PARENTS BELIEVE THIS THINGS SHOULD BE A PART OF CHILDREN EDUCATION AND SHOULD BE TAUGHT IN SCHOOL. SO THAT KIDS ARE AWARE HOW IMPORTANT ROLE IT IS TO STAY FIT. RATHER THEN THAT CHILDREN ARE SO OBSESSED WITH JUNK AND FAST FOOD ITEMS WHICH ARE NOT GOOD FOR HEALTH. TO SIMPLY IT LOOK AT THIS EXAMPLE IF CHILDREN ARE HAVING SOMETHING RELATED TO PHYSICAL EDUCATION IN THEIR SCHOOL THEY WILL KNOW HOW VITAL IT IS AT A YOUNGER AGE AND WILL BE AWARE OF IT.

HOWEVER, OTHER ARE ALSO RIGHT AT THE VIEW THAT IT SHOULD BE NOT TAUGHT DURING SCHOOL TIME BECAUSE IN THE MODERN ERA THERE IS LOT MORE TO BE TAUGHT. THIS THINGS CAN ALSO BE DONE BY

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it is only 182 words long. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both views, the discussion is incomplete, and the second body paragraph is cut off mid-sentence. The position is stated in the introduction, but the lack of length prevents a full exploration of the arguments. To improve, you must ensure you provide a complete, balanced discussion and a clear conclusion, while meeting the minimum length requirement to allow for sufficient idea development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'However' to signal transitions. However, the logical progression is severely hampered by the incomplete nature of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is unfinished, which disrupts the overall flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'This things can also be done', where the pronoun reference is imprecise. To improve, focus on completing your thoughts within each paragraph and using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word-choice errors, such as 'opposite thinking' instead of 'differing opinions' and 'this things' instead of 'these things'. The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and relies on simple, everyday language. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more topic-specific collocations and avoid basic grammatical errors that affect word forms, such as subject-verb agreement.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Examples include 'PEOPLE NOWADAYS ARE HAVING' (incorrect tense usage), 'RATHER THEN' (spelling error for 'than'), and 'OTHER ARE ALSO RIGHT AT THE VIEW' (inaccurate preposition and pluralization). These errors are noticeable and occasionally make the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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