Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Its debated that some people belive academics classes should only focus on education and some belive it should alos focus on physical activity classes is important as a part of childs education. I firmly belive both are important for a well rounded carrer and well-being of childrens. Lets discuss both views below in details,

While academics classes like Maths, Science and Social are important for childerns eductional growth and main focus on this during the school time give students ample time to learn and benifit from the experinced teachers in their school time and learn different subjects which are essential part of the society when parents invest their time and money in their childrens future eductional instutions should make sure these students are knowledgeable with a give time for educational classes, when the core focus is on academics the result would be positive.

If we take an example, student attending school for a time of 5-6 hours a day and if there is a focus only on academics for sure childerns will learn and gain knowlegde.

Physical education or activity is also essential part of childs growth both mentally and physically as the focus is not always about academics where childrens get bored with the same concept being learend over the school time, rather with the inclusion of physical edcucation and activities childrens can be taught the same concepts in a activity based learning concepts and there are high chances childrens will be excited to learn the same concepts in physical activity rather than just sticking too books. However, this should not deviate students from reading books and loose focus on academics.

For an example, if we include physical education classes this will help students starting to react and stay fit and active while attending academics classes and learn the academics classes fast and scentifically proven its really necessary to move your body constantly rather than sitting for 5-6 hours straight, as this will have negative impact on their body.

I firmly belive both are important and should be carrier out hand in han, while academics gives childrens theoritical idea they can learn the same concept implementation in physical education classes. Also these classes will help students perform better in academics. Physical education classes must also focus on mental health well-being, and building strong character with their physical apperance as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both the importance of academics and physical education while clearly stating your opinion. You have developed your ideas reasonably well, particularly in the later paragraphs where you explain the benefits of activity-based learning. However, some arguments are slightly repetitive, such as the focus on '5-6 hours' of school time, which appears in two separate paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than circling back to the same concept. Your position is consistent throughout, which is a strength.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'While', 'If we take an example', and 'However', to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. For instance, the opening paragraph is a bit run-on, and the connection between sentences could be smoother. Some referencing is slightly unclear, and the use of linking words is sometimes repetitive. Improving the variety of your cohesive devices and ensuring that sentences flow more naturally into one another would significantly enhance the readability of your work.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'well-rounded', 'theoretical', and 'scientifically proven'. However, there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'belive', 'alos', 'childerns', 'edcucation', 'scentifically') and some word choice inaccuracies (e.g., 'carrier out hand in han' instead of 'carried out hand in hand'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more precise collocations to express your ideas with greater sophistication and accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, the essay contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('its debated', 'childs growth') and punctuation. Many sentences are overly long and lack the necessary commas to make them readable. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence boundary control and ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound will help improve your score.

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