Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.
Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people says that physical education classes are more important of child education. And other people believe that academic education more beneficial during school time . This essay will intend to analyze both the view along with my perspective.
To commence with, that both type of education are important and suitable for every field of life. To explain it, physical education study is more beneficial of thoes studen who interested in Gaming and build there caree in sports as well as it's Good for maintain the physical health. For example, A survey conducted by Amazon of Canada in 2016 most of the student take a part of sport to take physical education classes.
As a result, spend more time of sport is important of student life
To Being with, when children study academin beginning of the years it's mor beneficial.
To Explicate it, academic study gives more opportunity to take a part of different field and and study different type of university to build there confidence and experience and gain deep knowledge to build there carear . For instance, A headline was published in a famous news paper The Tribune in 2024 80 per student chose
academin study to build there carear .
Hence. The study have more benificial effect.
Conclusion. Although both type of study have a great impact of life and skills. For oppion both are
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, though the conclusion is incomplete and lacks a clear final statement. The ideas are present but remain underdeveloped, often relying on vague examples like the 'Amazon of Canada' survey or the 'Tribune' headline, which lack depth and logical connection to the prompt. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which significantly limits the ability to fully develop the arguments. To improve, you should expand on your reasoning with more detailed explanations and ensure your conclusion clearly synthesizes your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic paragraphing and some cohesive devices like 'To commence with' and 'For instance'. However, the flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors that make the progression of ideas feel mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt. The conclusion is particularly weak and lacks the necessary structure to tie the essay together. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details that flow logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'build there caree' (career) and 'academic study gives more opportunity to take a part of different field'. There are also persistent spelling errors throughout the text. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To improve, you should work on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and expand your vocabulary related to education and personal development. Avoid using informal or incorrect phrasing when discussing academic topics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('Some people says'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as the incomplete final sentence. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with errors in basic verb tenses and word forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like 'there' versus 'their'.
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