Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.
Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In todays world, every one has different point of view in terms of academic education and physical education as they both play a vital role in children’s development.While people have often disagree with each others view point.Lets discuss both the views and try to understand them along with some of the pro and cons.
Beginning with physical education, children’s learn how to develop their body physically not just mentally.As we all know physical education consists of yoga and sports which helps one to adapt skills like concentration, calmness and focus with the help of yoga. Additionally being a part of team sports, it makes them learn how to work as a team which unlocks certain characteristics like trust, reliability and many more.
Secondly, focusing on academics is important as it makes them discover the information present is the textbooks written by great personalities which helps to understand the fundamental of life and work.While academically one can also acquire social, geographical, historical as well as mathematical knowledge along the entire journey of life.
According to me both the aspects of education are important and none of them outweighs in terms of advantages.Moreover they do not harm any age group in either way.I think educating children both academically and physically on the same time would be a great combination as the skills they learn can be applied in more effective way with right guidance.I also agree that it would be little be hard to catch up at first but it would be just a matter of time till the body adapts the schedule.For instance, I like to play volleyball when i get bored during studies which boasts my concentrations level as i get charge and help me to concentrate more afterwards.
In conclusion, physical education is as important academics during school time but it also depends on person to person because everyone is not at the same level in terms and academics and physical education.Neither should be left behind.One can try to focus more on which part they lag instead of focusing just on one.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the discussion on academics focuses on textbooks and general subjects but lacks depth regarding why some might prioritize it over physical education. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and introduces a new point about individual differences rather than summarizing the main arguments effectively. To reach a higher band, ensure that each body paragraph provides a more robust explanation and a concrete example that directly supports the topic sentence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Beginning with', 'Additionally', and 'In conclusion', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the flow is interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'While people have often disagree with each others view point'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'outweighs' and 'fundamental', but there are also frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'boasts my concentrations level' (should be 'boosts') and 'in either way'. Spelling errors like 'todays' (missing apostrophe) and 'every one' (should be 'everyone') are also present. A wider range of precise vocabulary and more attention to spelling would improve the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('children’s learn', 'people have often disagree') and punctuation (missing commas, incorrect apostrophes). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the message, they are frequent enough to limit the score. To improve, the student should focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that punctuation is used correctly to separate clauses.
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