Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.
Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Education plays a vital role in everyone life . It is very important more focus on study for good academic performance. But some people believe physical activities are equally important I explain both view points and my view point in my upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with,People believe that physical activities classes is equally important for children. For example it is very important to take care of children mental health as well as physical health .Its time for their growth physically and mentally if they play and also they learn different games and in future it’s very beneficial for them .students choose games also as a career option . However, it also impact their studies if their focus totally transfers to play instead of studies. They can postponed the physical education play periods near the exam so that students can continue their study .
According to me physical education is important for children growth.but in positive way such as , allowed 1 hour in 8 hours and also if there is exam are near or than teh discontinue this for some time .
To conclude, physical education is equally important for the youth .it helps to developed the body growth such as height . But for academics it can be balanced.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both sides of the argument and provide a personal opinion, the discussion is underdeveloped. For instance, the points regarding mental health and career options are mentioned but not sufficiently explained or supported with detailed examples. The position is clear, but the lack of depth and the brevity of the response prevent a higher score. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with more detailed reasoning and specific examples to ensure the essay is fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with' and 'To conclude', the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt or unclear. The paragraphing is present but the internal logic within paragraphs is weak, particularly in the second body paragraph where the ideas about exam schedules feel disconnected from the main argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will help improve the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms such as 'important', 'study', and 'games'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'physical activities classes' instead of 'physical education classes' and 'discontinue this' which is slightly unnatural in this context. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to incorporate a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to education and health, and focus on using more precise synonyms to avoid repetition and improve the sophistication of your expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'physical activities classes is'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'it helps to developed'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and improper comma usage. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses before submitting your work.
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