Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.
Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
People have divided their opinions regarding whether the physical education classes are essential for students or not. A group of individuals believe that it is more crucial for students to pay more attention to their academics than others. While, Others think that physical study is a vital part of pupils education. In this essay I will elaborate both views and share my opinion.
There are adequate evidence of this view, which are substainable
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, reaching only 73 words. Because the essay is incomplete, it fails to address the prompt's requirement to discuss both views and provide a supported opinion. The introduction is present, but the body paragraphs are non-existent, meaning the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure you develop each viewpoint with supporting arguments and examples, and provide a clear conclusion. The current length prevents a full development of ideas, which is a critical requirement for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too short to demonstrate a coherent structure or the effective use of cohesive devices. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction, the lack of body paragraphs means there is no logical progression of ideas. The transition between the introduction and the single sentence that follows is abrupt and lacks logical flow. To improve, you should focus on using linking words such as 'furthermore', 'however', and 'consequently' to connect your ideas within and between paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and contains errors, such as 'substainable' (likely intended as 'substantial' or 'sustainable') and 'physical study' (which is not a standard collocation for physical education). The range of vocabulary is very limited, which is expected given the extremely short length of the response. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic terminology related to education and health, and ensure you check your spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
There are several grammatical errors in the short text provided. For example, 'There are adequate evidence' is incorrect, as 'evidence' is an uncountable noun and should take the singular verb 'is'. Additionally, 'pupils education' lacks the necessary possessive apostrophe ('pupils' education'). The sentence structures are simple, and the lack of length prevents the demonstration of a wider range of complex grammatical structures. Focus on subject-verb agreement and basic punctuation to improve your accuracy.
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