Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

7.4124 & 9G

Education plays crucial role in every person's life. Puppils learn a lots of things when they get education from school. There are some people says that physical education is important rather than academic education, I will discuss both of views and give my own opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with physical education, physical education is important for every kid's life, in the school teach physical education, student can come to know to how to be improve their physical health by doing some exercises, Moreover, learning physical education is not only useful for kids but also helpful for their parents, they do not need to teach them how to maintain physical health. children can know about healthy food and healthy habits for good physical health.

Howe when it comes to accadamic Studies, it also plays crucial role, if physical education teach student learn physically maintemce then academice education helpful to progress in future, There are different types of academic subject available which are needed for fututure jobs and profession

for crample if somebody aims to become doctor, it should be mendatory to learn science. So, acadamic Subject are very important Apart from this, acadamice Studies help students to get good grades in their school which can boost their confidence.

To sum up, according to my view point both studies are important for future of kids, sometimes kids have good grades in their academic but not well in physicall education, It can put adverse mpact on their health, which make their future dull and boadr.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on physical education versus academic focus and presenting a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Ideas are relevant, such as noting that physical education aids health while academics secure future jobs, and an example of becoming a doctor is provided. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. The arguments are generalized rather than deeply extended with specific, well-supported explanations. Nevertheless, a clear position is maintained throughout, satisfying the requirements for a Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a discernible introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is attempted, though some paragraphs are quite brief or poorly linked internally. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'To sum up' are employed, but their usage can be mechanical or inaccurate, as seen in 'Howe when it comes to accadamic Studies'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression between sentences occasionally falters due to grammatical fragmentation. Overall, it demonstrates the characteristics of a Band 5.0 in terms of cohesion and paragraphing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'physical health', 'profession', and 'confidence'. However, there are frequent spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'accadamic' instead of academic, 'maintemce' instead of maintenance, 'mendatory' instead of mandatory, and 'boadr' instead of broader or boring. These errors sometimes create noticeable strain for the reader, although communication is generally maintained. The lexical range is minimally adequate, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writing demonstrates a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence forms, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and punctuation slips, such as 'There are some people says', 'in the school teach physical education, student can come to know to how to be improve', and comma splices like 'it should be mendatory to learn science, So, acadamic Subject are very important'. These errors cause difficulty for the reader and demonstrate limited control over complex structures, placing the essay firmly at Band 5.0.

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