Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary world all the citizens with all ages want to fit and active but parents also want thier childrens are good in any academic fields which will they succed in thier life.So today I would like to contrast both the point of view in upcomig paragrahps.

Firstly, we know that todays people have so much stress related thier work or house work so physical education both younger or older residents would like to perform a normal physical activities in thier life. In addition, I would suggest that physical education classes in schools for kids and youngsters will helpul in various ways, like they can mentally fit and they can internally as well as external stay fit instead of any health issues. Furthermore, we also know that todays generation eating more junk food rather eating healthy food so parents keep eye on thier youths so they dont eat oily food which is harm to thier health.For example, Gym inhabitants go gym daily to maintain thier body fit and fine.

On the other hand, Im continue my views on academics during school time. first and foremost, without Education is nothing. Education is a key to success, therefore in this Earth ample of Scientists , Generalists and many successed persons who are very rich in education and did extra hardwork to achieved thier goals. Eventually, every members of a community will learn academics for achieve thier goals

In conslution, I totally agree with both statements and every school in the country give physical education with other academics so our youth will no disturb with health related problems and keep focusing on thier curriculums so they should victory in Future.

yours faithfully,

Ekamjeet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views regarding physical education and academics, and attempts to give a personal opinion, notably in the conclusion where the writer states, "I totally agree with both statements." However, the position is somewhat confused as agreeing with opposing views simultaneously lacks clear analytical distinction. Ideas are presented but remain under-developed and general, such as mentioning that kids "can mentally fit and they can internally as well as external stay fit." The discussion on academics is also overly brief and supported with vague statements like "Education is a key to success." While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of depth, underdeveloped supporting arguments, and slight confusion regarding the stance place this response firmly at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which shows an attempt at overall organization. However, progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing logical links, such as jumping abruptly from general health to gym inhabitants in the first body paragraph ("For example, Gym inhabitants go gym daily..."). Cohesive devices are often inadequate or misused, and referencing is unclear at times, as seen with "Im continue my views on academics during school time." Paragraphing is also disrupted by informal letter-closing conventions ("yours faithfully, Ekamjeet Singh") at the end of an essay. These issues result in a mechanical and disjointed flow, aligning with the Band 5 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted. Throughout the text, the writer relies on simple and everyday words, often making noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as "thier" instead of their, "succed" instead of succeed, "upcomig" instead of upcoming, and "harm" instead of harmful. Attempts to use less common or more academic vocabulary result in inaccurate collocations and awkward phrasing, such as "Gym inhabitants go gym daily" and "many successed persons." These noticeable lexical errors and limited range cause occasional difficulty for the reader and reflect a standard typical of Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most complex sentence attempts are faulty, incomplete, or grammatically confused, such as "In this contemporary world all the citizens with all ages want to fit and active but parents also want thier childrens are good..." Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, tense inconsistencies, and faulty word forms (e.g., "kids and youngsters will helpul" and "so our youth will no disturb with health related problems"). Punctuation and capitalization errors are also prevalent, such as missing spaces after periods and commas. Because errors frequently cause strain and confusion for the reader, a Band 4.5 is warranted, rounded here to 4.5 or 5.0 based strictly on the descriptors.

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