Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.
Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Few people believed that outdoor activities classes play an indispensible role in pupil's life while other think academics claases more crucial in their school life. In my opinion outdoor activities is beneficial for students to focus on their study. I will discuss both points in upcoming paragraphs with suitable examples.
On the one hand, physical education is important for children during their school time as it helpful for them to relax and break from academic classes. To explicate it, if children take part in physical activities, they will not only get healthy life style but also get relaxation from their study. In other words, students can do their study with fresh mind which will really fruitful for them to complete their study with higher grades. For instance, a survey was conducted by the Tribune newspaper in India shows that 80% students got successfully highly grades in their exam with the help of physical class. Therefore, outdoor activities help for learners to become active and well-being.
On the other hand, academics field also important for them in their future life. To make it more clear, majority of learners show their interests towords playing games, outhdoor activities so on, it create distractions from their study. If they do not focus on their study, they will not become success in their future as study is mandatory to get a jpb in particular field. As a result, to become financial independent children should more focus in their study during school time.
To conclude, education play important role for students to get sky rocketing salaries in their future life to become financially independent, however in my opinion sports and outdoor activities also helpful for them to get relaxtion from study for their physical development.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both views regarding the importance of physical education versus academics and presents a clear position that physical education is beneficial for academic focus. All parts of the prompt are covered, although some ideas are somewhat repetitive and under-developed, relying on sweeping generalisations like the cited survey statistic. The progression of ideas is present, but the arguments could be extended further with deeper reasoning and more robust examples. This performance aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor, which requires all parts of the task to be addressed with relevant, though sometimes under-developed, ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is divided into a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an overall logical arrangement. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two views. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or faulty, such as 'To explicate it' and 'To make it more clear', which sound unnatural and detract from the flow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and logical progression within paragraphs stumbles slightly due to sentence construction issues. This corresponds to the Band 6 descriptor, where the overall arrangement is coherent, but cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'indispensible', 'sky rocketing', and 'financially independent', but these are accompanied by frequent spelling and word-choice errors, including 'academicae', 'outhdoor', 'towords', and 'relaxtion'. There is also awkward collocation and word formation throughout the text. The range is adequate for the task, but errors in spelling and lexical items occasionally require the reader to interpret meaning. These characteristics place the response firmly in Band 5, which features a limited but minimally adequate range with noticeable lexical errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional structures ('if children take part in physical activities, they will not only...'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak, featuring frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('education play', 'activities is'), article usage ('a healthy life style', 'in exam'), and prepositional phrases ('focus in their study'). While these errors rarely completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the response. This pattern reflects the Band 5 descriptor, where attempts at complex sentences are often faulty and frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader.
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