Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time.

Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the physical education class are more important for every student because in the physical education class to teach a different knowledge and creativity for studant .in physical education in practice a help a make different projects for student.

and academic school time More important for every student. academic school time in students are slow very confuse to share techer and slove the query. and teachar also focus in students education . academic school in studants are meet a new new teacher and children so improvement are teach how to make a relationship.

that's why physical education and academic education both are same important for children.both are help to childern improvement and education skills .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address both sides by saying physical education teaches different skills and that academic time helps students learn and interact, then conclude that both are important. This gives a relevant response and a clear basic opinion. However, the discussion is very brief and the reasons are difficult to follow or evaluate; for example, the point about students being “slow very confuse” is not explained, and no specific example supports either view. The response also does not meet the required minimum of 250 words, so the task is only minimally developed. To improve, explain each side with a clear reason and a relevant example, then state your view more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic sequence: the response first discusses physical education, then academic study, and ends with a conclusion that both matter. This helps the reader identify the two views. However, progression within the ideas is weak, and the opening sentence is difficult to connect to the explanation that follows. Linking is also limited and sometimes mechanical: “and” begins a new section, while “that's why” introduces a conclusion without clearly showing how the preceding points support it. Use separate, clearly developed paragraphs for each view and your opinion. Connect each reason to its explanation with accurate transitions, and use pronouns or repeated key terms clearly so the relationships between ideas are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “physical education,” “academic,” “students,” “teacher,” and “relationship,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or forms make the intended meaning hard to understand. For instance, “different knowledge and creativity” and “make different projects” do not clearly express what students gain from physical education, while “slow very confuse” is unclear. Spelling and word-form errors such as “studant,” “childern,” and “studants” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for discussing benefits, such as fitness, teamwork, concentration, and academic achievement, and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements and attempts a few longer constructions, such as “because in the physical education class to teach…” and “academic school time in students are…”. These attempts show an effort to explain reasons, but the sentence patterns are often incomplete or incorrectly formed, so meaning can be difficult to recover. Problems include missing or misplaced verbs, subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries; for example, “both are help” and “the physical education class are” do not form accurate clauses. Capitalisation and spacing after full stops are also inconsistent. Practise building complete subject–verb sentences first, then join related ideas with “because,” “which,” or “so” while checking agreement and punctuation.

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