Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study? 

Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is no doubt that education plays an important role in individuals life.Most of the eduactional systems believe that it is necessary for children to learn foreign language ,but some thinks , it is not important.I have a partial point of view on this satement.

On one hand, it helps to reduce lanaguage barrier. To explain it,individuals learn foreign language to interact with other nations people or if they are planning to move or live in other country for their personal and financial growth.Living in new country and not knowinhg their native language leads to face difficulities in their daily life.For instance,if you are planning to move to Germany and not knowing their language then how you are eligible to buy something from the store and do some job.Therefore,it is helpful for the growth of a person.

On the other hand,it has some cocncerns too.The major one is native language extinction.To elaborate it,if we focus on learning new language then it true that we are focused on that particular language instead of speaking our native language.For example,In India, parents put pressure on children to speak English instead of their mother- tongue and that is the reason that 60 percent of regions that are in India loss their language and their cultural identity.

In conclusion, I conclude that learning foreign language is not bad , but we should not forget our own language too.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both the benefits of learning another language and whether it belongs in education, and your position is that it is useful but should not displace a child’s first language. The examples about moving to Germany and pressure to speak English in India are relevant. However, the response is short of the required minimum, and this limits how fully you can explain your ideas. The benefits are mainly framed around migration and daily transactions; you could also discuss education, employment, travel, or communication across cultures. The claim that 60 percent of regions in India have lost their language is unclear and needs careful explanation or a more specific, reliable example. Develop your final view directly rather than repeating it in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The signposts “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt: the Germany example moves from buying items to finding work without fully explaining the connection to the benefit. Some linking phrases, such as “To explain it” and “To elaborate it,” feel mechanical, and punctuation spacing makes sentence boundaries harder to follow. Use clearer links that show cause and effect, and make each paragraph develop one central point in a sequence. The conclusion could also synthesise the two sides more explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “language barrier,” “native language,” “cultural identity,” and “financial growth.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “language extinction.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word combinations are noticeable and sometimes slow the reader: “eduactional systems,” “lanaguage,” “other nations people,” and “loss their language” are examples. Some wording is repetitive, particularly “language” and “important,” and “personal and financial growth” is not clearly connected to the example. Check spelling carefully and choose more natural collocations. A broader range of precise terms for communication, employment, and cultural preservation would make the argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if you are planning to move to Germany” and a reason clause beginning “because” in the discussion of language loss. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. For example, “some thinks” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “Living in new country and not knowinhg their native language leads to face difficulities” has problems with articles, verb forms, and sentence construction. Missing spaces after punctuation and inconsistent comma use also affect readability. Practise building accurate sentences with clauses, and check agreement, articles, and verb patterns before adding more complex structures.

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