Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study? 

Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this educational world there are lots of education institutes who teach foreign language to children which is required by school.on the other hands ,there are some others school where this language is not required.i think that both views are right on their on space .both have different kind of benefits .But i consider that study about other countries languages have their own advantages.

Firstly,there are lots of schools who hatve requirements related to study about froeign languages. they have rule every student of that school will learn about language of others nations not only native language.because they think that students should be multi-lingual.To examplify ,in my younger brothers school to learn about foreign language is also mendatery .Because of that my brother is learned french language and still learning spanish as well .In instance ,after learning two to three language he will be multilingual and can talk with foreiners with confidence.

Secondly, In many other schools there is not any requirements for students about learning of foreign languages.because they think that it should be choise of learners not of school mangements .they do not want to inhance burden of study of students.In results ,student will take this as extra work and do not like to go to school as well as they will not able to learmn about their mother language.However, i think that that should be compulsory in all school because its make them confident.

To conculde , school manage ment should be take care of students burden they should handle thins according to students but they should make students multi-lingual as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of foreign language study and the opinion on whether it should be part of education. However, the development is somewhat limited. While you mention benefits like being multilingual and communicating with foreigners, the explanation remains quite basic. To improve, you should expand on these ideas with more depth, perhaps discussing cognitive benefits or career opportunities. The position is clear, but the arguments could be more thoroughly supported to reach a higher band. The structure is logical, but the content feels a bit repetitive in the second paragraph regarding the 'burden' of study.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'To conclude'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods (e.g., 'school.on the other hands ,there'). These errors occasionally disrupt the reading process. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your punctuation is accurate to help the reader navigate your ideas more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on simple terms like 'lots of', 'good', and 'work'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'hatve', 'froeign', 'mendatery', 'inhance', and 'learmn', which distract from the content. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling. For example, instead of 'lots of', use 'a significant number of' or 'numerous'. Expanding your range of collocations and synonyms will help you express your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'languages have their own advantages'), article usage, and sentence fragments. For instance, 'In instance ,after learning two to three language he will be multilingual' contains errors in phrasing and pluralization. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation limits the score. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and plural forms will significantly improve your accuracy.

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