Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study?
Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is sometimes argued that young students should learn no more than one foreign language. I largely disagree with this statement and I believe that children must lean more than one language and this will be beneficial not only for their personal life but also professional.
The main reason I hold this view is that children mindset is more open to learn and to understand multiple languages better than after when they grow up. For example, I saw many videos of children learned more than 4 languages and they switch between them easily and without any problem. This show that they have the capacity and the ability to learn when they are young.
Furthermore, if they learn a new language they will learn also the tradition of the other country also they will be open to a new mentality, habits and even they will discover a new details and information’s that will enhance they knowledge at the future. Consequently, they can contact other persons from different country and they will make more friends around the world and they will not stuck un one language that limit their relations.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that bilingual children are more smart and open to normal kids for the reasons given above.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the benefits of foreign language study and the opinion on its importance in education. However, the essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement (209 words), which negatively impacts the development of ideas. While the position is clear, the arguments are somewhat superficial and lack the depth required for a higher band. For example, the point about 'tradition' and 'mentality' is mentioned but not sufficiently expanded upon with specific, relevant examples. To improve, you must elaborate on your points with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for full development of your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore' and 'Consequently'. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes mechanical, and the use of linking words is limited. Some sentences are disjointed, such as the transition between the benefits of language learning and the conclusion. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall flow could be improved by using a wider variety of cohesive devices to connect sentences and ideas more naturally. The paragraphing is present but the content within those paragraphs is quite brief.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'smart', and 'important'. There are also some errors in word choice and form, such as 'information’s' (which is an uncountable noun) and 'they knowledge' (should be 'their knowledge'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of more sophisticated or academic vocabulary limits the score. To improve, focus on learning collocations and more precise academic terminology related to education and linguistics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'children mindset' (missing possessive 's'), 'lean more than one' (should be 'learn'), 'after when they grow up' (awkward phrasing), and 'they will not stuck un one language' (incorrect verb form and preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and proofreading for basic grammatical slips.
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