Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study?
Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Pupils are required to study one or more foreign language on other hand study is not a requirement . There are some reasons for benefits of foreign study. It will be justify below.
Overall, the trend of abroad study will increase day by day . significantly, students needs learns one or more foreign language due to increase trend of abroad study and they needs to basic knowledge about foreign language . drastically, the benefits of abroad study is maintain good communication with other country's people and helping to other.
Moreover, It helps to improve children memory level it is important for remember more things study also learning new things .
drastically, it helps to make incredible choice for career opportunity and also improve positive attitude , confidence for talk to some one and give job interview it is straight forward for confidentiality . Also build problem solving method and also builds social connection . it help to children for social intraction also it maintain social connection .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 167 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address the benefits of language study and its importance, the arguments are underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack specific examples or logical depth. The position is not clearly maintained throughout the text, and the brevity prevents a full exploration of the prompt's requirements. To improve, you must expand your points with detailed explanations and relevant examples, ensuring you meet the length requirement to allow for a comprehensive discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. Paragraphing is present but ineffective, as the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and often repetitive. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes incorrect manner, such as the frequent and inappropriate use of 'drastically' to start sentences. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of arguments. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed central idea that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'increase trend of abroad study' instead of 'increasing trend of studying abroad' and 'maintain good communication with other country's people'. Some phrases are awkward or unnatural, such as 'it is straight forward for confidentiality'. To improve, you should focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary. Avoid repeating the same words and try to incorporate synonyms to demonstrate a broader range of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'students needs learns'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, making the text difficult to read. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and pluralization. Practice writing complete, error-free sentences before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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