Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some educational systems, children are required to study one or more foreign languages. In others, foreign language study is not a requirement. What are the potential benefits of foreign language study? 

Do you think foreign language study is an important part of education?

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir or Madam

To whom may it concren, I am writing to this letter regarding the childrens are required to sudy one or more foreign language. I do believe foreign language are required for all the childrens becouse when childrens are getting adults, they have chose to study abroad. While the other country have there own language. If you knopw there language it would be easy for your abroad life and you can dominate your whole study journey.

From my point of view, the foreign language is very important for all schools, Colleges and universities. On the other hand most of the students are loving to go to abroad for thire higher studies however i also did my higher study in Ukraine. So if you know any other languages such as English, French, German and Russian language you can dominate the whole world.

Thanks for your time and i look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

Rezaul Karim

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student has attempted an essay on foreign language study, but the response suffers from two major issues: first, it has used an incorrect formal letter format ("Dear Sir or Madam" and "Yours faithfully"), which is inappropriate for an essay task. Second, at only 160 words, the response falls severely short of the 250-word minimum requirement. Although the student briefly mentions potential benefits such as studying abroad and career dominance, these ideas are underdeveloped and lack adequate support. Consequently, the task has only been addressed partially, meriting a Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is divided into brief paragraphs, but the overall organization is compromised by the inappropriate letter format at the beginning and end. Logical progression is weak; sentences are loosely connected using basic transitional phrases like "On the other hand" and "So", which are not used contextually to contrast ideas properly. Reference words are sometimes ambiguous, and paragraphing does not follow a standard essay structure. However, there is a basic attempt to group ideas related to studying abroad, placing this criterion at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling throughout the text. For example, the student writes "concren" instead of concern, "sudy" instead of study, "becouse" instead of because, and "thire" instead of their. Phrases like "dominate your whole study journey" and "loving to go to abroad" show limited control of collocation and natural phrasing. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic topic, frequent errors restrict the lexical score to a Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures. The student attempts complex sentences, but they are frequently faulty, such as in "the childrens are required to sudy" and "when childrens are getting adults, they have chose to study abroad." Subject-verb agreement errors, incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation mistakes are frequent throughout the short text. These errors can cause difficulty and strain for the reader, placing this criterion firmly at a Band 4.5.

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